Goblin: Tower of Gates LitRPG Book One

by Paul Bellow

Original Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Female Lead Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Virtual Reality

Ever dream of being trapped in a virtual reality video game?

Craving ONE MORE QUEST?

Read on, adventurer.

Sarah, Eric and Josh secretly log onto the new Tower of Gates VRMMORPG and stumble on a world unlike any they have seen before. Swords, sorcery, and intrigue abound. While not planning on staying in the unreleased game long, game life happens.

They soon learn the stakes are even higher than they imagined. To survive, they will need all their strength, courage, and wisdom, not to mention help from friendly NPCs, magic items, and everything else uncovered as they delve deeper into the game.

One more level becomes a matter of life and death.

 

[Author note: First draft. I will post as often as possible. Feedback appreciated.]

 

 

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JustSaiyan
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Don't Let a Single bad Review on Chapter 1 Keep You Away

Well written, interesting game mechanics, hidden humor, and the characters are more than they appear to be in chapter one. Please don't listen to trolls, the bane of RRL. yell 

Read it! 300 plus pages of litrpgness!

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Sorry for the short review. I'm not a huge fan of D&D, but this story is nethertheless both well written and enjoyable. I'm not sure why it recieved  a 3 star rating, but I'm giving you five stars to try and balance it out as well as hopefully give you more readers. 

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Likeability is such a ......l

I am giving this story a 2 star score just because i only read the first chapter.

How can i even try to rate a story if i have only read 1% or less of the story?

That is quite easy, every story has a main cast and the current main cast burns my eyes my mind and lastly MY RAGE.

Short summary i don't count this as a spoiler because it all happens in chap 1.

The main char is a cripple who uses sci fi shizzle to hover arround.

It seems he has a childhood girl friend who he likes very much not necesarly in the romantic sense.

But yea he called her over to play a game with him as they havent had much time together in the last years all far so good.

The problems start appearing as soon as he opens the door and he sees her while putting a smile on his face.

Behind his childhoodfriend stands a moron who wasnt invited but invited himself in because he is her boyfriend and needs to be everywhere she gos because he is insecure yay.

He has a very hostile attitude demeaning the mc on every turn ruining the time the mc wanted to spend with her.

He litteraly controls the girl by denying her hobbies and calling them stupid insulting the mc by calling him a cripple or saying meh my girl doesnt like cripples so dont dream on it ect.

The fucking girl doesnt even defend him how can she not value herself more she is her own person!

If her boyfriend controls who she may play with even going as far as insulting them based on their disabilities then fuck them both.

The mc even takes it all without shouting back, again. Why THE FUCK IS HE THERE?

I know that the girl needed the guy to carry the mc into the device but that aint worth it.

 

Hence the title i hate all these chars the girl can go fuck herself the guy should already be dead as his stupid brain found it a good idea to lick the electric socket.

he has a fucming brain the size if a chicken and that is me being kind!

And lastly the mc doesnt matter how much i want to sympetize with him as he is a victim in all this he should look elswere for friends.

I even skipped all chapters trying to look for a chap where i can see progress for the mc and his childhoodfriend.

The only way this all can be fixed is if this moron of a boyfriend never existed to begin with or gets killed of very very fast or even better makes it so the girl breaks up with him.

Even if this does happen if it doesnt happen in the first 5 chapters then his shadow will kill any and all fun i could experience in this story as Ifucking hate his existance.