Lone: The Wanderer

by Lone

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead LitRPG Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Strong Lead Summoned Hero Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Nine-to-five. The daily grind. Life. Painful years of school. Working as a slave for some undeserving corporate big-wig. The monotonous life of unemployment. We all experience this in one way or another, and we can all conclude one thing: it's dull.

Such a truth rings true even for the fabled Lone Immortus, a powerful nine-tailed Golden Foxkin. However, what would you do if your monotony was suddenly ground to a halt and you were thrown out of your comfort zone along with a young girl forgotten by time?

Perhaps you might have done things differently, been more organised, immediately died, gained control of the world in a matter of days, but this is Lone's tale, not yours.

Watching two insecure people struggle to survive and find their place in an unfamiliar land just might be enjoyable to witness. Who knows? One thing's for certain, it won't be an easy path for them to tread, and what could possibly be more entertaining than watching people endure hardships and grow?

I know of at least 8 Gods that would answer with, 'Absolutely nothing.'

I wonder. After seeing this journey from start to finish, how would you answer?


A/N: This story is in the middle of a rewrite, so please forgive any noticeable plot holes and wonky chapter numbers. I am working on it every day, so understanding would be greatly appreciated.

The new cover art is a courtesy of the very kind and talented ssddx.

This novel is a participant in The Writer's Pledge

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1: Prologue ago
Book 1 Chapter 1: Depression and Change ago
Book 1 Chapter 2: Screens and Panic (Due to the rewrite, this chapter combined several chapters, resulting in the missing chapters) ago
Book 1 Chapter 8: Discussion and Pain ago
Book 1 Chapter 9: Distraction and Goblin ago
Book 1 Chapter 10: Darkness and Perspective ago
Book 1 Chapter 11: Closeness and Boat ago
Book 1 Chapter 12: Sailing and Pirates ago
Book 1 Chapter 13: Unsummon and Rage ago
Book 1 Chapter 14: Regret and Void ago
Book 1 Chapter 15: Matriarch and Carriage ago
Book 1 Chapter 16: Academy and Arrival ago
Book 1 Chapter 17: Clothes and Guards ago
Book 1 Chapter 18: Inn and Library ago
Book 1 Chapter 19: Lilith and Fears ago
Book 1 Chapter 20: Learning and Meatball ago
Book 1 Chapter 21: Books and Basement ago
Book 1 Chapter 22: Surgeon and Eyes ago
Book 1 Chapter 23: Tiera and Sight ago
Book 1 Chapter 24: Healing and Unfamiliar ago
Book 1 Chapter 25: Feelings and Speech ago
Book 1 Chapter 26: Sophie and Purple ago
Book 1 Chapter 27: Immortality and Confession ago
Book 1 Chapter 28: Love and Kiss ago
Book 1 Chapter 29: Soul and Laughter ago
Book 1 Chapter 30: Bath and Cringy ago
Book 1 Chapter 31: Scroll and Tower ago
Book 1 Chapter 32: Waste and Contracts ago
Book 1 Chapter 33: Legendary and 971 ago
Book 1 Chapter 34: Window and Departure ago
Book 1 Chapter 35: Alterion and Bone ago
Book 1 Chapter 36: Hero and Fun ago
Book 1 Chapter 37: Astera and Gilbert ago
Book 1 Chapter 38: Dragonkin and Dwarf ago
Book 1 Chapter 39: Shana and Fate ago
Book 1 Chapter 40: Emotions and Groping ago
Book 1 Chapter 41: Tailor and Déja-vu ago
Book 1 Chapter 42: Father and Hostility ago
Book 1 Chapter 43: X-Men and 600 ago
Book 1 Chapter 44: Black and Blue ago
Book 1 Chapter 45: Frustration and Skills ago
Book 1 Chapter 46: Possibility and Fluffy ago
Book 1 Chapter 47: James and Brooch ago
Book 1 Chapter 48: Victoria and System ago
Book 1 Chapter 49: Past and Emotions ago
Book 1 Chapter 50: Pet and Tamer ago
Book 1 Chapter 51: Card and Ranks ago
Book 1 Chapter 52: Sheep and Revisit ago
Book 1 Chapter 53: Title and Teleportation ago
Book 1 Chapter 54: Help and Blue ago
Book 1 Chapter 55: Mana and Lossa ago
Book 1 Chapter 56: Questions and Bond ago
Book 1 Chapter 57: Orb and Change ago
Book 1 Chapter 58: Edward and Quest ago
Book 1 Chapter 59: Wolf and Orc ago
Book 1 Chapter 60: Vision and Lord ago
Book 1 Chapter 61: Bodies and Magic ago
Book 1 Chapter 62: Illusion and Affinity ago
Book 1 Chapter 63: Sky and Sweat ago
Book 1 Chapter 64: Show and Door ago
Book 1 Chapter 65: Cages and Koala ago
Book 1 Chapter 66: Irrationality and Ring ago
Book 1 Chapter 67: Family and Gravity ago
Book 1 Chapter 68: Glowing and Feelings ago
Book 1 Chapter 69: Bridge and Tournament ago
Book 1 Chapter 70: Church and VIP ago
Book 1 Chapter 71: Jealousy and Ordinary ago
Book 1 Chapter 72: Monk and Discovery ago
Book 1 Chapter 73: Zombie and Wind ago
Book 1 Chapter 74: Gains and Summoner ago
Book 1 Chapter 75: Fenrir and Cruelty ago
Book 1 Chapter 76: Emma and Ice ago
Book 1 Chapter 77: Lightning and Maturity ago
Book 1 Chapter 78: Lives and Vihaan ago
Book 1 Chapter 79: Eko and Palm ago
Book 1 Chapter 80: Shield and Conclusion ago
Book 1 Chapter 81: Holy and Isolation ago
Book 1 Chapter 82: Rank and Power ago
Book 1 Chapter 83: Cera and Agreement ago
Book 1 Chapter 84: Chicken and X ago
Book 1 Chapter 85: Pain and Worry ago
Book 1 Chapter 86: Auction and Peter ago
Book 1 Chapter 87: Potions and Book ago
Book 1 Chapter 88: Impatience and Fluffy ago
Book 1 Chapter 89: Gem and Fox ago
Book 1 Chapter 90: Unique and Henry ago
Book 1 Chapter 91: Concentration and Curiosity ago
Book 1 Chapter 92: Name and Glasses ago
Book 1 Chapter 93: Passion and Owl ago
Book 1 Chapter 94: Tinkering and Familiarity ago
Book 1 Chapter 95: Zeek and Week ago
Book 1 Chapter 96: Infiltration and Truth ago
Book 1 Chapter 97: Arthur and Orb ago
Book 1 Epilogue: Departure and Because ago
Book 2 Prologue: Escape and Consequences ago
Book 2 Chapter 1: Summons and Summoning ago
Book 2 Chapter 2: Embrace and Bastard ago
Book 2 Chapter 3: Eggs and Sanity ago
Book 2 Chapter 4: Ruins and Swords ago
Book 2 Chapter 5: Fear and Purple ago
Book 2 Chapter 6: Deep and Offer ago
Book 2 Chapter 7: Master and Lightning ago
Book 2 Chapter 8: Intent and Carrot ago
Book 2 Chapter 9: Elements and Transfer ago
Book 2 Chapter 10: Melding and Assassin ago
Book 2 Chapter 11: Runes and Clicker ago
Book 2 Chapter 12: Discussion and Sandy ago
Book 2 Chapter 13: Unique and Resolve ago
Book 2 Chapter 14: Binding and Marbles ago
Book 2 Chapter 15: True and Prove ago
Book 2 Chapter 16: Spatial and Strengthening ago
Book 2 Chapter 17: Weeks and Mood ago
Book 2 Chapter 18: Luck and Shop ago
Book 2 Chapter 19: Warning and Huts ago
Book 2 Chapter 20: Power and Smoke ago
Book 2 Chapter 21: Chieftain and City ago
Book 2 Chapter 22: Races and Honesty ago
Book 2 Chapter 23: Arrogance and Greyfus ago
Book 2 Chapter 24: Apology and Prizes ago
Book 2 Chapter 25: Pride and Eyes ago
Book 2 Chapter 26: Bubble and Age ago
Book 2 Chapter 27: Hospital and Library ago
Book 2 Chapter 28: Trolls and Halo ago
Book 2 Chapter 29: Life-dream and Bastian ago
Book 2 Chapter 30: Linguist and Song ago
Book 2 Chapter 31: Eolande and Tests ago
Book 2 Chapter 32: Past and Glade ago
Book 2 Chapter 33: Iron and Enchanting ago
Book 2 Chapter 34: Incomprehensible and Jealousy ago
Book 2 Chapter 35: Silver and Bronze ago
Book 2 Chapter 36: Names and Forging ago
Book 2 Chapter 37: Thoughts and Lemurian ago
Book 2 Chapter 38: Enchantress and Reflexes ago
Book 2 Chapter 39: Reytla and Tail ago
Book 2 Chapter 40: Awakening and Progress ago
Book 2 Chapter 41: Depression and Training ago
Book 2 Chapter 42: Apology and Bestial ago
Book 2 Chapter 43: Hoose and Studies ago
Book 2 Chapter 44: Apprentice and Suspicion ago
Book 2 Chapter 45: Guard and Culture ago
Book 2 Chapter 46: Amends and Passiveness ago
Book 2 Chapter 47: Boy and Shanty ago
Book 2 Chapter 48: Help and Zel ago
Book 2 Chapter 49: Farm and Warning ago
Book 2 Chapter 50: Barbarians and Desert ago
Book 2 Chapter 51: Request and Events ago
Book 2 Chapter 52: Months and Lust ago
Book 2 Chapter 53: Swind and Barrier ago
Book 2 Chapter 54: Status and Level ago
Book 2 Chapter 55: Snake and Fracture ago
Book 2 Chapter 56: Death and Discussion ago
Book 2 Chapter 57: Smile and Beating ago
Book 2 Chapter 58: Teasing and Luck ago
Book 2 Chapter 59: Council and Sparring ago
Book 2 Chapter 60: Throne and Sealing ago
Book 2 Chapter 61: Papa and Beggar ago
Book 2 Chapter 62: Exit and Nations ago
Book 3 Chapter 1: Mount and Tents ago
Book 3 Chapter 2: Breakfast and Hostility ago
Book 3 Chapter 3: Pate and Flora ago
Book 3 Chapter 4: Group and Encounter ago
Book 3 Chapter 5: Malcolm and Card ago
Book 3 Chapter 6: Bradros and Craz ago
Book 3 Chapter 7: Alcohol and Wolfkin ago
Book 3 Chapter 8: Rings and Doubt ago
Book 3 Chapter 9: Arrogance and Relief ago
Book 3 Chapter 10: Malt and Request ago
Book 3 Chapter 11: Gains and Cards ago
Book 3 Chapter 12: Contract and Box ago
Book 3 Chapter 13: Reward and Colours ago
Book 3 Chapter 14: News and Al'ka ago
Book 3 Chapter 15: Sins and Ranks ago
Book 3 Chapter 16: Interview and Achievements ago
Book 3 Chapter 17: Plates and Wanderers ago
Book 3 Chapter 18: Conclusion and Trouble ago
Book 3 Chapter 19: Weaselkin and Underestimation ago
Book 3 Chapter 20: Praise and Catkin ago
Book 3 Chapter 21: S-Ranker and Sabrina ago
Book 3 Chapter 22: Leaders and Orc ago
Book 3 Chapter 23: Highness and Thoughts ago
Book 3 Chapter 24: Time and Stars ago
Book 3 Chapter 25: Genius and Greed ago
Book 3 Chapter 26: Panic and Hooded ago
Book 3 Chapter 27: Determination and Pride ago
Book 3 Chapter 28: Nyahaha and Fifth ago
Book 3 Chapter 29: Elven and Keepers ago
Book 3 Chapter 30: Growth and Arm ago
Book 3 Chapter 31: Hug and Crimson ago
Book 3 Chapter 32: Demonstration and Children ago
Book 3 Chapter 33: Wily and Fourth ago
Book 3 Chapter 34: Attack and Contract ago
Book 3 Chapter 35: Necromancer and Confidence ago
Book 3 Chapter 36: Elksworth and Challenge ago
Book 3 Chapter 37: Pyramid and Hunger ago
Book 3 Chapter 38: Eighth and Fluffy ago
Book 3 Chapter 39: Binding and Acceptance ago
Book 3 Chapter 40: History and Scarf ago
Book 3 Chapter 41: Strings and Rachel ago
Book 3 Chapter 42: Exaggerations and Flames ago
Book 3 Chapter 43: Gluttony and Counter ago
Book 3 Chapter 44: Flames and Victim ago
Book 3 Chapter 45: Oars and Youths ago
Book 3 Chapter 46: Lipsilk and Ythmagobla ago
Update and Announcement ago
Book 3 Chapter 47: Itchy and Plans ago
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Proddle
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Rushed start but grown to absolutely love

I often don't review like this, but it needs to be made clear that though at the start of this story the main character seemed to rush into power and was unrelatable. Through the story's progression and the writer improving his own skill, it grows into a fantastic fiction. I am also aware that the writer is doing rewrites on the first part of the story, and I highly recommend that people read his other fiction, SHOVEL KNIGHT!! It's pretty damn great. 

Kintaril
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Let's begin with the characters, since that's the worst score and work up:

The main character is contradictory and excessive in what he portrays. On one hand he is a professor at a university and is clearly capable to interact with his students on a regular basis, otherwise he wouldn't keep that job for very long.

Next thing he lashes out at the being which gives him a chance at a new life. Granted it's a stressful situation, but the extend to which that develops is questionable.

Now to further argue my review I have to spoiler the story to a certain degree so be aware of that and decide for yourself if you want to continue reading.

Because he is annoyed he basically imprisons a innocent girl, a child in his eyes, in an empty dimension. Yes, the first chapter establishes a possible reason for his behaviour, but I don't find it to sufficient to justify his reactions towards the girl, especially since she is some kind of divinity. I doubt wether anybody would be that snarky with such a powerful being, even if he was the worst arse on earth...

It goes further since that being(1000 or so years old by the way and capable of assuming her adult-form) then goes on to develop a crush on him. So basically a case of stockholm-syndrom.

Sounds bad doesn't it? Well it is to a degree, the saving grace is, that the character development of both the mc and the support-cast is logical and moves forward in a coherent way. It gives me hope for the future of the novel, especially since the MC grows to be more likeable the further you read.

Grammar and style are solid. Not much I can say there. No awful mix up'swith words and the mistakes are minor most of the time. There is room for improvement, but I'm no literary student.

Story:

The story is interesting, from the beginning you know there is more to this than just the reincarnation of the mc and his journey through the various nation on this new planet. He explores the world and grows while doing so, which I assume prepares him for what is to come :) This is what kept me interested and with the story, until the MC grew to be more likeable.

If you like powerful leads and far-reaching storylines endure the first fifty-ish chapters and see for yourself.

Lucien of the Old Blood
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The story of an OP MC, well somewhat OP, and his travels as he, for lack of a better term, finds himself for the first time. So far we have experienced many sub plots, extreme changes in the MC character growth (which is uncommon in a lot of novels), and have gotten to see so much of a new world despite just barely leaving the first town. As long as the author doesn't drop it, the world that has been created so far could last for atleast another 200 chapters and not even once feel old.

That-Cat-Guy
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I love the book so far but i want him to change into a pure race soon like ancestor fox spirit or true origin golden fox of spirit or progenitor fox of creation something like that as his final form after he unlocks his last awakenings but besides my personal wishes its a 10/10

minimupp0702
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good not to op character with some actual story

grammar wise i can't find many errors possibly a ' here or there but nothing more.

style wise i can't say much cause frankly i don't really have the knowledge to assign any style score so i gave it an avrage.

the characters have some background that is used but nota really deep. While I dislike stories with extremly extensive character background a bit more would make my reading more fun. Not neccesarily good since you have to think about the general person but still. I also love the fact hat the mc doesnt really care about people other than himself and co, might be because ive read to much selfpitying oh what should i do novels lately or not but still nice feature.

story wise you have  interesting story with hints about events to come and powers behind the scenes which makes for an intriguing read but at the same time it fun and not overly serious as for the 4.5 instead of 5 it's personal prefrences. 

 

Overall a good read for those who like op characters who mix a bit of intrigue with fun and action.

stonechild2419
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            While it is not the most eloquently written story, there is some praise to be given. Disregarding all themes and characters at first, I believe this story does a decent job at keeping your attention and wanting to you to continue reading it. This is do to your actual skills at composing any story, not just this one. I am not saying that the story is gold, but it is certainly worth the read. With enough practice and research done on literary tools in stories to engage the readers and evoke emotion in them, you could certainly reach an expert level of writing.

            I feel as though the side characters could be more flushed out and given depth too. When that happens the dialogue can become more organic and you can then develop for each character a personality and not just defining traits.

            Overall though, I think this is a good read and I have enjoyed reading it up to the current post. I will be eagerly awaiting the next one.

Dawn Sky
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Cringy edgelord meets chunii weaboo

The story is written fairly well without too many grammatical errors, although the style does not stand out as anything spectacular it is more then readable.

However everything is majorly let down by the incredibly unrelatable MC. He is supposed to be a 24 year old adult, working as a teacher before he died. However in the story he is an awefully cringy, illogical, mentally unstable 12 year old weaboo edglelord with chunii tendancies. He also manages to be a complete asshole at the same time.

I cannot reccomend reading this and wish you the best of luck if you try.

trekshcool
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A very interesting read once you get through the first few chapters the story picks up and you can really see the mc slowly change into a better person. The abilities he creates are strong but not story breaking and the mc has a domineering attitude.

All in all worth a read.

Namsar
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The story is fucking amazing.the characters are lovable and diverge from typical cliche types plus the development and fleshing out of the character is solid.The best part is the fact ther is no fucking harem and the stereotypical revenge plot.also there is kitsune which is a lovable and cuddle worthy mc.

MadHat3r
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Not bad, but could be improved upon

The story's decent but unless your a robot who is not capable of human emotion I would skip it.

The style itself is good enough and consistent which is all I really ask for in that regard, while the story and plot itself is not. I may simply see it that way because I hate most romances but this one seemed like a dating sim set on easy as the edgy teen reveals he's not that edgy and just has temperament issues. Not only that but the dialogue seems award and forced there's just no "flow" to go withand this is the main reason I had to drop this story. However, I still didn't see anything truly gamaticly wrong so if you like reading with out emotion have at it.

P.S. I liked the early chaps but as of 25/26 it became to cringy to bear and I find that sad, to the author I recommend acting the dialog out the way you invissoned it and writing that experience down. I will probably come back in a month or 2 to see how this does.

Keep trying and improve that's all I really want!!