Not A Hero

by theDeva

Original Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Romance

Every 109 years after the demon king's death, a new one is born. The kingdom of Cumaria has faced this threat for ages and are resolved to overthrow the demon king again. Their solution, the summoning of heroes. An ancient magic that summons three heroes endowed with great potential.
What happens if they summon one more?

Follow Boris, the inadvertent addition to the heroes, as he tries to make a place for himself in a world of magic. Meanwhile his friends are chosen heroes, destined to kill the demon lord.

MATURE CONTENT.
Tagged [17+] for Strong Language, Gore, Violence.

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Velodius
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Aside from some of the cosmetic grammar problems, this is actually one of my favorite works in RR.

 

I understand that this seems like the "normal" transported genre, but it feels more along the lines of "Rising of Shield Hero" even without his hero powers.

 

I appreciate a good story that focuses on how a character solves problems without his inherent gifts or the transported God shoving a golden spoon up his ***. I wish there were more like it. I like these stories more because character development is more pronounced if the MC goes from weak to strong through an arduous journey/training regimen. This is not to say that OP characters make superior or inferior stories. I am just saying that a weak MC experiences character development and story flags that are at least equally enjoyable to that of OP MCs. Leave it up to personal preference. (Though I was a bit skeptical of his power to memorize and learn language fast)

 

I do see the point of some of the critics. Some stereotypes are present. However, I don't mind stereotypical characters as long as their actions, speech and bearing is consistent and fleshed out which I believe here it is.

 

I hope you continue this work as it is a refreshing change from the current OP-ness. If you update more frequently, I believe this work could take a top spot.

Sriper
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Its amazing how slow this ff is....

But I just cant stop reading, also part of it being to rush his ineptitud and become a badass.

But yeah I don really like OP MC, they are like harem stories, they are cool and great, but 8 out of 10 stories like these end up in the trash in earlier chapters.

 

Even if we say what ever we want about your ff, we love it so take what you want but also write what you want.

Ignis
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Plausible Deniablility

This story has plenty of style.
Poems that are hard to write, and a fancy literary style.
Sadly there is are a few grammar errors that give pause as well.

The Characters really lead the story. The story itself has nothing new to add(yet), but the characters are written so well that it feels like a new type of story.

piens15
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Week but hard working.

I disagree with the Quick and Lunitan this is good story. The MC is not your everyday ‘i cant use magic Ops an accident happen now i’m OP’ character. I like the fact that he has to bee creative that he has to put in effort just to scrape by and in the end do something amazing by showing the results of his training. I would like him to stay unable to use magic, and if he becomes able to let him grow through struggles and don’t pull the i’m genius with magician BS where MC surpasses archmages in 1 week or 2. Also other 3 heroes may be a trope but boris in my opinion is like fresh air in this sale room that is filled with 200% plot armor characters from other fan fics.

yappet107
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While this story might seem cliche at the beginning, it is actually quite good.  While the Mc may seem weak, not every story has to have a super harem with an op character.  It’s nice paced and you should give it a try.

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Well. I found this fiction by following the phantasmal architects, and so far , i don’t regret the time spent reading it. It’s well written

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While starting with another hero summoning and some cliché characters, and a few average chapter, the story improve fast. It’s not just some pale copy or anything. As the story goes on, more and more characters with clashing objectives are added, and the story take is own path. It’s interesting, it feel plausible, it make sense, it’s not random. 

The background isn’t swallow, it’s interesting (i keep imagining scythians fighting with scythes and pixars as some 3D faeries, but that’s me : those two race are well depicted and timely introduced)

It seem like a few people criticized things about how warrior spirit worked. I won’t, it’s fine. 

The story is going somewhere, it don’t feel like some random situation forced upon the protagonist.

As a reader, i would like the global situation to move forward on it’s own without the main character. It’s already the case, to some extent, and it’s just a little rant from me, but i would really to see a scene with some external viewpoint about The Heroes, the templar intervention, the kingdom situation. 
Futhermore, i liked it.

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Some people already pointed out how cliche it can be at the start. Well, it don’t last long. i’m kinda repulsed by hero summoning based stories, but as the story was included in the phantasmal architect and was certified OP-MC clean, i tried it. (the author speech on chapter one or two actually helped).

I won’t go in full details, but the heros are okays and Diana and Elaine are interestings. Violets and Grey are nice too, Grey is well introduced. There are enough differents characters (Welmar, Arthur, the counselors) and they are cool (as in well made characters, they play they part).

Boris, the main character is well depicted. He evolves at the right pace. He is interesting to follow.

The casting maybe lack some antagonist characters, but it’s not really a problem here.

  • Style

I personnally like your style. You write well, i’m not lost in your description, your sentences are also well balanced. Your vocabulary is alos okay. You switch point of view when needed, without abusing it.

The author improved a lot from his first chapters to his last.

I have nothing more to say.

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Nothing ever hurted my eyes. I may have missed a few, but at least there is no misspelled characters names, so it’s good. 5/5

 

I will keep reading this fiction, it’s a good one. Thanks for writing it so far

 

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Refreshing- A change of pace from Summoning Fantasy

Hurrah! So this review is from Chapter 8, :D

 

First of all, I would like to applaud your efforts on making a story that is yours. You gave effort in making the fic original and, to the best of your abilities, unique. That is really something to be proud of ;)

I love how you made the characters human and not personality-given machines. Boris responded by changing, and I can see how it is different from the other summon stories I have read. The grammar is perfect and the plot so far is pretty awesome. The characters themselves are beautiful, albeit some (only some) seem pretty shallow at the moment. Perhaps it would be better if you played off each one's motivations and some thoughts, to make them seem less one-dimensional.

The plot is smooth so far, with no visible plotholes, and is pretty compelling :D For the words though, I think there could be some improvements in the way you weave your universe. Like, there could be a higher immersion level: give us more background on the world itself, the rules. Show us how the flowers look, the sky, the castle. Give us a taste of how you see the world you have made.

Do that, and I think you're pretty much set ;)

 

THANKS FOR THE YUMMY STORY ;P

Zanderkoala
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The writing is nearly impeccable. Seeing a good 3rd person novel on this site is rare. Keep up the good work! Also, please kill Ray. Horribly. >:^( 

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actually read it before reviewing

Reader the quick and Lunitan, just wanted to say a few things, yes the mc starts weak, yes he cant use mana, however he dose no remain weak forever if you read chapter 7 you would see the changes that don't in any way contradict earlier statements about his inability to use mana. the reason that the heros don't question the kingdom more is explained in later chapters, and hinted at in earlier ones. 

The mc is never said to be unattractive nor does he act in a particularly pervers manner. Neither is he hated by the others, ray is openly friendly with and obviously cares for him, the girls don't like him that much and think he's a pushover but nor do they hate him. 

The heros are never treated like shit, they get opulent rooms, that the mc turns down because he feels uncomfortable with them and they have a feast every night. did I remember the fact that they're living in a [email protected] castle?

they don't involve the mc in combat because the risk to his life was significantly higher than to the other heros, and the kingdom was  worried that they would lose the favour of the heros should he die, the only reason that he started training at all was because ray threatened the king to treat him the same as the heros, again showing that the mc is not hated by everyone.

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Pretty good style, but nothing you haven't seen before

 This is a decent novel that you might want to check out. Unfortunately, it has a few problems that prevent me from enjoying it fully.

 

Style: The author has a good writing style. He has enough details to let people visualise the scenery and he explains most things thoroughly. He separates paragraphs well and I think he deserves a high score for that. Only reason I didn't give him full stars is due to transition sentences being choppy at times, but that is excusable.

 

Story: Now this is where the main problem comes in. At first glance, the author develops a very good story. He provides thorough explanations on magic and goes through training sequences quite well. Yet, there is a big problem with the core of the story itself, the concept. When I started reading, I thought a typical and cliche storyline where the protaganist was summoned along with other people and he either has no power or seemingly has no power. That in itself was fine as long as it was handled properly. Unfortunately, the author went to the incredibly used cliche "Chaotic Good" path, where the MC defies authority, but himself is a good guy. I've seen this done multiple times in various stories, so this one doesn't feel unique to me.

 

Another point is that his style of writing itself doesn't fit with the story he's going for. The author has this dark and dreary writing style with intrigue and treachery lurking in the air. It doesn't really fit with the protagonist being a "good guy" and takes down the story.

 

Grammar: Grammar is decent, with some errors here and there. Overall, I have nothing to complain about here.

 

Character: The main character himself is develop quite well. We see the struggles he goes through to become stronger. He has this sort of "I am justice" kind of air around him. Unfortunately, as I said before, it doesn't fit well with the style of writing. The side characters are a mish mash. Some, like Diana, are veloped fairly well, but most others are fairly stereotypical and cliche like the "evil king" (you'd think that by now there would be one GOOD king who summoned heroes).