John Smith

by Kippyd8

Original Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy LitRPG Male Lead Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

John Smith woke up with a pounding headach and a beautiful woman. Soon the day turns sour as the system decides to implement itself, join John as he struggles to stay alive and gain levels in the not so popular new Earth.



 

This is my first time writing and I realize there is much I could be doing better so constructive critisicm is very much appreciated.

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tomica
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So far so good, more pleese as I am looking forward to reading more and seing hhow tis develops