Diary of the Shadow Queen

by kaplanicus

Original ONGOING Fantasy Gender Bender Martial Arts Reincarnation Supernatural Wuxia
Warning This fiction contains:
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In the future where essence beasts ravage that is left of humanity, an essence cultivator held his ground to save refugees only to die and reawaken in the body of a young girl.  He found himself in a time three months prior before the rules of the world had changed.  Given another chance at life, what shall the warrior do?  Try to warn humanity?  NOPE!  The reborn warrior is far more concerned about not dieing a second time and to do that she needs to become stronger.  But first she needs to survive her abusive father. 

-Author note: This is my first attempt at writing.  So, I would appreciate any useful feedback and I do apologize for my horrendous punctuation.  I can't promise frequent updates, but I will try to write at least 1 chapter a week.  

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Night_Shade0611
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I like your story but I can still do more work! Btw I like stories like this so I look forward to many like this, keep it up!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Good start, with a new twist on an old genre

This is a story set in modern times, right before the apocalypse starts and afterward. There are many stories about a person in modern times dying and being sent to ancient times, or some cultivation realm, or another world of some sort to reincarnate into someone's body. This story is along that vein, and is about a guy dying post-apocalypse after being overrun by monsters and being sent back pre-apocalypse times; reincarnating into the body of a girl that had just died or had a complete mental collapse after years of child abuse by her father. Now in the body of a girl, she decides to try to start cultivating before the apocalypse happens in order to get above of the power curve. This is an interesting spin on the whole reincarnation and cultivation genres, and I look foward to where this will go as the story progresses. 

The grammar is pretty good and is very readable even if there are some silly mistakes. (See the synopsis above, where the author spells "dying" as "dieing.") However, I have not spotted any mistakes is grammar or spelling that have ruined the story or broken my immersion. 

All in all, this is a wonderful start to a story, and I am eagerly awaiting more chapters. Thank you kaplanicus, and keep up the good work.