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Wynne might have been human once. It's hard to say.

Now he's a bunker core, a nanomachine controller responsible for an entire complex.

Of course, the place is a bit wrecked. And the world outside is ruins. And he's pretty sure that whoever put him here is going to come looking for him at some point...

Dungeon Core, Post-apocalyptic style. Come for the mutants, stay for the dystopian adventure!

Claimer: My name is Andrew Seiple. I write this story, and I own the rights to it. It is posted on Spacebattles.com and Sufficientvelocity.com, as well as royalroadl.com

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Melcontent
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If you like the Laboratory

Got hooked in on it. This is a dungeon core story mixed with fallout. The novel is still in the early stages but so far I like what I am reading.

j03man
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A fun engaging story with great characterization and flawless grammar and spelling, much like the author's previous works.

Let's hope this story doesn't sell you on a fun and engaging premise before devoloving into an increasingly depressing downward spiral of betrayals, horrific acts, and tragic characters without anywhere near enough triumph and cuteness to justify the emotional trauma it inflicts on its readers...

Soapbox: I'm still gun-shy from how much Threadbare jerked me around after selling me on such a cute uplifting premise. I have no problem with Grimdark novels per se but the misery needs to justify itself with gleeful amorality a la Everybody Loves Large Chests or with rewarding insights and concepts.

If you're deconstructing morality and subverting the hero's journey there needs to be some pay off. The more invested I was in Threadbare's world and characters the more the story hurt me and it only ever got worse. Here's hoping this time's different.

Hyperion915
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tl;dr its professional level writing, read it and see for yourself

the story is intriguing and the plot engaging, the characters lifelike and interesting, the grammar fucking impeccable, really theres nothing to hate about this story. A nice break from the constant stream of garbage that stems from this site, and most others as well im guessing. well worth a read, theres only a few chapters out at the moment so just try it out, you have nothing to lose and a great story waiting to be read if you continue.

 

side note, teitoku's review is bullshit. normally i wouldnt mention other reviews specifically, but since there are so few reviews written i dont want some preteen dumbass to hurt the views this story is getting. first of all, i have no clue at all what was supposed to be confusing after chapter ten, literally nothing stood out as confusing in the slightest. its fairly easy to follow whats happening in that section of the story, so im left wondering what the fuck he was complaining about. second, for those of you who dont know, reading someone's mind is a whole lot different from sifting through their memories to find shit out, not to mention wynne doesnt even have any memories for argus to read. one involves passively collecting information distributed across whatever channels exist between the two, and the other is an active attack similar to hacking which the thing clearly couldnt do anyways. of course argus doesnt understand the humour, he literally never encountered it before. last of all, if not having those stupid blue tables is enough to lower a star rating on a story for any large amount of people, then theres literally no hope for this website. stupid shit like that doesnt affect the story, it doesnt even affect the worldbuilding. i dont want to be mean, but at the same time im incredibly annoyed with the standards of certain people on this website. literal garbage gets 5 star reviews here, but this story somehow gets those bullshit low ratings.

 

note to author: i hope you end up publishing this at some point, im short on money now but id love to purchase a copy whenever its available

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Stylistically, I would have thought that the status screens and system responses would have been properly formatted BBCode tables. Not that they would have to be tables -- a story can survive without them -- or mayhap I've been spoiled by other stories on RoyalRoad to just expect it. Anyway, the style score is the lowest I give, and at 3.5 stars it's still doing well.

The highest rating I give is 4.5 stars, for the story. Style aside, I didn't have any problem following the story so far, at least until I started reading Ten. Then the mention of other cores or places on Earth got me a little (lot) confuzzled.

The character and characterization seems okay; again, I could follow it all, up until reading Ten. I don't like the swearing so much, bastard former soldier or not he is, but I deal with it. The largest glaring hole in character is in A-R-G-U-S itself -- starting out reading memories, yet tripping over the verbal jokes or teasing. Aw, come on now man, if a "helper" routine like that could invade one's memories like that, and has for previous (maybe several) occasions, then why oh why in all writerdom could it not understand those simple witticisms??

Still. The general pacing of this story feels okay .. again, up until the perspectives and mentions in Ten. That really threw me for a loop, starting to read that. Who, what, where? I don't know. I still don't know. Eh, you know what they say, 'fix it in the rewrite'. But you're young, kid, you might make it as a writer one day.

puppetgoestututut
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Another promising start from a great author

while simmilar to a series by skylar grant lost demiurge makes the story his own and i personally cant wait to read more as this world he builds develops

lucifuge
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May find some inspiration

The futuristic dungeon series by skyler grant is also a dystopian dungeon book on amazon can read for free if you have kindle unlimited. I agree with puppetgoestututut