The Demon and The Angel (Complete)

Cons

1) while it has 2 lead characters; it feels as though there is 1 female lead with 1 male support lead character

2)Too many deus ex machina powers and victories

3)after 30 or so chapters the leads still arent fleshed out

4)no background immersion details-ever

5)story progression seems to either feels rushed or without details. in addition to the filler

6)A bad case of "guest" appearances throughout the story

7)side characters are essentially pawns with no hard emotions or personality

8)Guns in what should have been a medieval  world.

Pros

1)unique story line or what it could have been

2) minor amounts of grammatical errors

3)numerous amounts of  drawings which help you understand how the author intent better

4) There is no singular good and evil.

7) long chapters with frequent updates

Thank you for you time and good night

 So... Next time just say in the begining it will be many books and not all the books in royalroadd, you leave people wanting to know what is going to happen

the plot in of it self is interesting not to different from the usual VR but at the same time with enough twists to make it stand out ok a lot of twists to make it stand out

This was an amazing Idea mixed with great characters but the number of spelling mistakes and interuptions in the story for you to ask questions makes it hard to be immersed. This last thing is more personal prefference, but the playwright type dialogue throws off what I think I am reading.

1. VRDraco you have found balance in your writing style of storytelling and necessary information about the world. Your story is great and the foundation is good but you fell short in developing your characters you introduced too many characters in a short periods of time and  many major events occurred. For example your two lead main characters  development occurred too fast and I'm not speaking about the rank ups  I'm talking about their personalities I felt that after they left to go train at the dungeon and the chapters that followed you stopped displaying their growth when you introduced all the new characters and making them lords and it felt forced same as with the romance which also seemed forced because the focused was shifted towards their world development and other events related to it and not the lives of the characters. I was happy that Lilian Baal and lily are in a relationship but apart from lily whose advances where obvious Lilian just didn't give me that feel when she was in the demon world all she said was that she missed Baal nothing in that hinted to romantic feelings I that the love just family love.I was also happy with the other romances but they didn't feel natural because there were no hints to fact that they would end up together well I would exclude the twins because they have special needs which need to be taken care by a certain male demon fox but other than that all I have to say is maybe a small rewrite would be in order to salvage the situation you don't need to change much just add more character interaction to give more depth to them because right now their are very bland. You could do .5 chapters for the interactions in the day to day life of the characters. Well thats my opinion on the matter your choice on what you do with it. I will continue reading.