Amongst the Stars

by LordOfTheDance

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Romance Sci-fi LitRPG Male Lead Non-Human lead Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

It only takes a single moment, a wrong turn, a few minutes late, or even letting someone pull out in front of you can change your life forever.

In one Accident Matthew lost everything he loved, his parents, his legs, his scholarship, his life. He didn't die but felt like he had, when he was at his lowest moment all his “friends” abandoned him when they saw there was nothing left to gain.

Spending every second confined in a prison when you used to be the best, the fastest, but one mistake took it all away.

But who said moments only come once?

A new Hope, A new Dream, a new Life.

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hornblower14
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If you are thinking of starting to read this story, the first few chapters are going to be hard. The prologue is an infodump of the worst kind, with massive holes and and no motivations given. The next few chapters are stilted, and move you along too quickly with quite a few spelling mistakes that made me cringe. HOWEVER. That being said, once you get past the beginning, it is well worth the time, with the writing getting smoother, and fewer mistakes, and the story and MC gaining much more depth and realism. After the 5th or 6th chapter I really got into it, and having finished the first 15 chapters, am eagerly looking forward to the next. This isn't the first piece I would recommend to someone on this site, but if you are looking for an evenings entertainment, look no further.

Myumara
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Always up for a good Sci-Fi

Looks pretty good based on what you have now. For some reason there aren't many Sci-Fi novels on this site so I always check out new ones. Without saying spoilers, Its nice your characters creation didn't dissapoint, and nice unique races.

Tekknos
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love where this is going so far. also love the stats system and VR set up.skills are good wating for more of them but its just starting so good over all.

VoidEater
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STYLE: Nothing amazing or anything. Not unique but acceptable. Average at best.

STORY: Storytelling is not really that good but I read worse. Lots of info dump but that's only in the early chapters. I'm Pissed off at chapter 17-18 when he(mc) suddenly feel pity towards the girl like some saint. Which is such BS because he already killed lots of people. Makes me think he's somekind of pedo.

GRAMMAR: Lot's of fractured grammar. Contains commor errors such as incorrect use of 'you're' and 'your'.

CHARACTER: Lot's of inconsistencies. I'm frustrated with the characters decision. One time I'm starting to like him when he's all badass until he saved the girl which I'm sure the author will use in later chapters as an excuse for dumb choices the mc will make.

OVERALL: I did enjoy the story in the earlier chapters but I hate the mc. He's so inconsistent.