Life Magic, An Elemental Fantasy

I just picked up this story today, and I am thuroughly enjoying it. (chapter 44)

It has some of the best grammer on this site.  The story flows pretty quickly, and in my opinion is well described (ie. concise descriptive sentences).  The characters are great and are well fleshed out with perfectly lengthed backstories.

I should quantify the four star for the style...  The jumps back in time take a couple sentences to catch on to.  That's not detrimental, but it is a little jarring.  Also Those cliffhangers maan, you know, the ones where there's two or more chapters of somebody elses perspective on the middle of a climax..   It was frustrating at first, but to your credit, the chapters were necessary.  That, and it doesn't happen often, so... cool.

Again, good story, and fun to read.

P.S.  This is a small thing that I always notice:  Of all the (30?) stories on this site that I've been reading Nobody has done the proper quotations between paragraphs of a single speaker.  For example: He said cheekily "I don't know what to write here.  Just pretend I'm being philosophical or something.

"You can tell it's still me talking though, because there was no quotation mark at the end of the last paragraph."

Kudos for that ;)

The author keeps teasing the reader with jessica's magic but never truly gets into it and goes off onto other POV far to often. This isnt a mystery novel, its supposed to be an action novel. But the way its written it should lose that tag.

I just finished reading all of the chapters currently released, and I have to say that it is a well-written and fleshed-out story. The characters are realistic in their reactions and have real personality. The story does get a little jittery in it's transitions, however, it is not too difficult to figure out what is going on after reading on a bit. Overall, the story is very enjoyable and I look forward to seeing more of Jessica's journey unfold. Cheers to the author!

I decided to try this fic out by pure chance and I am happy that I did. Do yourself a favor and check it out.

I adore this story line and the characters in it. This story is interesting and unique and well worth a read. The only thing holding this story back from greatness in the grammar and writing style.There is the ocasional clunky discription, odd grammar choices (use of *in strange* places, perhaps  italics would be better suited for these phrases), andsome jomping back and forwards in time that I personally would consider revising.

All negatives aside, I think this story  (and the author) have brilliant potential and I will be following it egarly. To give you an idea about how much i like it, this is the first - and only - story I have subscribed to so far on this site.

Two thumbs up from Birdie, keep up the good work!

Great story.

I forgot about this story FOREVER ago and only rediscover it while creeping on tomolones favorites list. This is a great book with some really interesting and original content.

This is going to be the first review I have ever written. Hopefully I'm not too harsh or incoherent.

I began reading this story without knowing a single thing about it, I didn't even read the synopsis. I believe the kids are calling it 'going in dry'. I just made that up, I have no idea what kids say.

The story though, it was a pleasant surprise. The first thing I noticed was the amazing imagery. Each action, person, place, or innocuous thing came alive with LeoDuhVinci's words. Although at times it felt a bit drawn out. Some things just don't need a paragraph to describe.

The characters were a different matter. They're personalities were built gradually over time. Each one unique and we'll thought out. The characters were easily my favorite part of the story. 

The only other minor issues I found within the story were a few minor grammar mistakes, but they were almost nonexistant. Compared to other stories on this site the grammar in this story is impeccable.

Overall, this story grabbed my attention from the beginning and never let go. The writing style alone will catch your interest so if your some random passerby reading this review, stop it. Just read the story.

So far with only 5 chapters i have enjoyed the story  it seems promising and like something i will continue reading in the future.

Came after seeing Tomolone's signature, and I'm really glad i gave this story a chance. Now I'm not one to usually write reviews, but i believe this story deserves it, so here we go!

The first thing i would like to point out for this story is the pace of its world building. Unlike most fictions that i have read recently, Life Magic has its information spread out throughout the chapters in a appropriate manner that eases me into its knowledge. In short, there's no chapter long info dumps that make feel like soldier trudging through a swamp with my rifle overheard just trying to make it to the other side.

The characters are excellent, and even though later on the perspective shifts from the MC to other relevant characters, they too also grip my attention and leave me wanting to know more on how they will affect the story. I love Jessica's character development, and felt that i grew with her because my contempt towards her sister, whom is a big B, eased as Jessica matured after the time skip.

The only thing at this time that i feel needs fixing is some of the chapters with font colors that are difficult to read. However, i did bypass the color issue by copying the text into word and changing the color, but i shouldn't have to do that just to be able to read the story easily.

Otherwise, this story is great and is a must read for this site, and I look forward to continuing to follow it! :3