Awaken Online

by da3strikes

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Cyberpunk Magic Male Lead Strategy Virtual Reality

Frustrated and angry with his life, Jason begins playing a first-of-its-kind virtual reality game and inadvertently finds himself on the path to becoming the game’s villain. As he continues playing, he also starts to suspect that the game is much more than it appears. Book one is available on Amazon here.


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The Bus Lurker
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Long chapters.

 

Hp is like change new world, so a decapitation is an insta kill, a lvl 1 could theoretically kill a lvl 130, etc. Skills are learned by doing, and not insta learned, stats can be gained through doing and not solely leveling. In my opinion this is the best type of virtual reality fiction.

 

Good grammar.

 

Goal, our goal is escape, revenge, and fun of course.

 

Overall 4/5 not enough character development as of yet, but I expect to see that change over the coming chapters. Give it a try, I think the author has commitment.

Sayl-san
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Bloody Briliant this is.

First of i read the whole thing so far in one sitting and was completely sucked in by the story. Perhaps that is because i can put myself into this character fairly well but above all the story is well written. The Mc is intelligent and plans out his moves with neat precision.

 I will refrain from spoiling any of the story, but i have to say its a new aspact of virtual reality gaming that i have not seen anywhere else. Although somethings are indeed similar to more well known stories such as Legendary Moonlight Sculptor.

I really enjoyed the read and i think others who read this will enjoy it as well, the author seems to be releasing chapters at a rapid rate, I can only pray he keeps it up!

catbearpenguin
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As an Evil Penguin Overlord of Earth and all realms below the 6th hell, i love it and would welocme him to my evil empire at any time 

Arwain
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Nice story and concept so far

Actually the first story that made me want to write a “review”.

 

Very good concept and grammar. MC is not really “OP” because he follows the rules of this peculiar VRMMO world.

Just a piece of advice.. if he is able to achieve power in this way, he shouldn’t be the only one. It’s not like he’s the only player in the world who’s smart, or able to notice the tricks that allow him to take down stronger opponents.

 

Anyway, keep un the good work!

 

firedrake915
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Quite enjoyable, but with several flaws

This is a review as of Book 1.  

 

I have found this fiction to be quite enjoyable, but not amazing.  I have found the plot engaging and although it uses a common theme of a potentially dangerous AI having more control than many would find comfortable, the story of the people involved with this AI keeps this portion of the plot engaging.  The other half of the story, the part focused on the mc, is more flawed.  

in the story, the mc gains power extremely quickly, doing in days what should take years.  This makes the story feel very fast paced, but it also makes the story feel very rushed.  Skills that should take days or weeks to level are instead raised multiple levels at a time, and encounters that should be extremely difficult are instead won both quickly and singlehandedly by the mc.  The first few combat encounters were very enjoyable, with the mc using his head to solve combat problems, but as the story progresses, he starts to use excessively powerful skills to beat down opponents who are supposed to significantly stronger than him but who instead behave more like straw puppets for him to practice his skills on.  Facing impossible odds should seem impossible, and not like simply another chance to gain experience.  

There are also several of the game elements that could either be either explained or improved.  For instance the fact that he has killed hundreds of opponents whose level is near or over 100, yet he has only found maybe half a dozen pieces of loot, most of which isn't even worth mentioning aside from the fact that it provised little in the way of bonus and is sold as the mc doesn't need it.  The mc has literally conquered a city and defeated an army that includes some of the most advanced players in the game and yet he is still running around in what is essentially starter gear dosen't follow.  Yes, the markets may not have much because the majority of the playerbase is still low leveled, but doesn't that imply that as one defines higher level enemies that they should find better gear.  

Another issue is the other characters.  First, are all the other millions of players (and NPCs for that matter) simply idiots, or only the one's the mc has encountered.  The fact that hitting the vitals of opponents can allow you to kill enemies whose level vastly outstrips your own isn't a bad thing and can allow for a game world that feels much less like a game.  The problem is that seemingly no other character seems to take advantage of this fact, nor do they seem to defend against such tactics.  Particularly the player's involved in the beta should be aware of this.  That the mc discovers this early on should give him the advantage over other player, but when powerful NPCs who have been living in the world all their life fall to this technique with very little resistance it instead feels like the author is getting lazy and letting all the plans of the mc succeed as planned.  If I already know that the battle will go as planned, there's no suspense; I only become curious to see what the plan is, and not excited to see how the battle will play out nor anxious to see whether the mc will actually succeed or not.  

Finally comes the characters.  First, let me say that the mc's character is great.  He is understandable, somewhat relatable without being generic, and he feels like a real person.  The other characters are less engaging.  Take Alex, the main antagonist for example.  He is set up as a psychopath who enjoys seeing the suffering of others, and is smart enough to hid himself from society.  Why then is he such an idiot in game?   True he might be arrogant, but he is also competent enough to have the single most advanced game character, even among the beta testers.  Yet when he lead an army The only resistance he is able to put up is in a personal level.  It might be that he is skilled in combat but a terrible leader, but if so then how did he get a army from a country that he couldn't control though personal combat power.  And if he is a skilled leader of men, then why was he unable to cope with a single player who had been in game for less than a week.  He should have known exactly what he was facing, sieging a city where the defender has the advantage even of you outnumber them, yet he didn't even attempt to capitalize on the traditional weaknesses of the undead besides his own personal class.  Someone as competent as him should not be naive enough to believe that he alone is enough to provide that sort of type advantage.  Most of the NPCs seem only to exist to show just how great the mc is or to provide him with thing necessary from the standpoints of game mechanics.  Lastly, most of the other characters that appear out of game actually appear to be fine, well thought out characters.  They are as fleshed out as our limited interaction with them allows, which is fine.  

Overall, I have enjoyed this story.  Though I have pointed out several flaws,  The story is still enjoyable with a detailed game world, and believable interactions between characters in the real world.  The plot about Alfred and the AI behind the game also shows much promise.  In the end I think that Awaken Online is worth the read.  

boringworld
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Well if you cannot read it here, then why keep it here?

jjjmmm009
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Daily updates please...

This is too good. I wish for daily updates.

The story is good and the MC is OP not because of his powers but because of his wits. He's really good with battle tactics and he totally exploited the system.

 

What I didn't like in the story is the cat. I don't know why it's there but it's irritating. Like a bug on a windshield. I hope that the cat is relevant in the plot.

 

One last thing: Please! Please don't abandon this story! Some stories in RRL I read were abandoned even though they're good.

 

I love this story!

MutantMannequin
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Devour this gem before you have to buy it at a bookstore

Awaken Online is poised to stand among the giants of the LitRPG genre, and certainly already towers over many of its peers in the web serial format. It takes the time to develop characters outside of the game, rather than immediately jumping into power leveling and protagonist hero worship, and the AO development subplot is the best kind of sinister--a cold, creeping feeling that, despite appearances, something just isn't right. 

 

LitRPG is filled with harems of vapid, two-dimensional lovers, whose only purpose is to adore a self-insert. Not so with Awaken Online, which has yet to explicitly address romance at all; if ever it develops, it will be between two deep, realistic characters. Also unlike many similar tales, AO understands that dark does not equate to evil. Leaders, especially new ones, can grow and learn--make big mistakes, then turn their flaws into insight. It all lends itself to a particularly likable protagonist.

 

Give Awaken Online a chance. It's unlike anything you've ever read, and it might just be the best free book you ever pick up.

Haythan
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Great story, fast uploads, good quality and long chapters. What else could you ask for?

Keep up the good work!!!

Tolack
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Evil never looked so good. In fact, it looks Amazing and Disgusting.

While Jason in game is definitely no saint (I mean, he does some awe-inspiring shit), but his gaming experience started right after years of torment added up and the last straw broke the camel’s back. What that means is that (with some guidance from a ‘friendly?’ diety) he went into the game with a drastic need to vent, and vent he did. 

 

Currently, we’re now getting to see what he’s going to do now that he’s vented and has to deal with the consequences of his actions. I can definitely say I’m looking forward to it! 

 

Now, if you’re wondering why I say ‘it looks Amazing and Disgusting’, that’s because that’s one way of describing his awe-inspiring act. It also describes the antagonist – it’s amazing that he get’s away with his bullshit and said bullshit is disgusting. 

 

If you’re also wondering why I docked a star from character; character development in this story is good, don’t get me wrong. But this story only has 28 chapters out so far and it’s chokabloc full of action! There’s nothing wrong with that at all! In fact, the more I write this, the more I feel like giving it 5 stars too (and that’s why story has 5 stars instead of 4) but all this exciting action and detailed characters means there are other characters we lack detailed knowledge about. I feel that once there’s a calm moment (ohmahgawd is that even possible anytime soon?) we need more good stuff about your characters – NPC and human. [Aka, once you have 50~60 chapters up, I could probably give character 5 stars without a doubt, probably because your PoV change at the start of each chapter allows us extra perception or just pure enjoyment from seeing the reactions of others.] 

 

To potential readers; if you remember that [Mature] tags exist for a reason, and you’re still willing to read this story, then you’re going to have a blast.

 

                                                                                                                                                                                    

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Book One (of a planned trilogy) is complete (ignoring planned editing). As a (new?) fan, I’m hyped for more. What I have read has excited me so very much that I’m looking forward to the next installment without a doubt. There is so much more to explore in both the game world and ‘real life plots’, the book has a proper ‘book one’ ending (aka an arc ends while a cliffhanger for book two appears), and the story quality is without a doubt good.

 

*WARNING*  EXTRA HEAVILY BIASED OPINION BELOW! READ AT YOUR OWN RISK!

[In fact, if da3strikes could find a way to make his ‘additional main characters/important side characters’ more “addictive” , then I’d be able to compare the quality of this story to The Iron Teeth and HTADOADB. Currently though? If I had to compare the excitement I feel for this story to another, I’d compare it to the hype I have for Tidal Lock. As for a story I’m hoping it will match? Savage Divinity!]