Demon's Journey

by Virlyce

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark Magic Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Traumatising content

Palan is raised in the harsh world of the demons, depending on himself to survive while raising his sister. One day, his sister falls sick and he's forced to make a deal with an angel in order to save her life. Unfortunately for him, that deal sends him a world away from his sister.


What happens when a ruthless demon is thrust into the world of the heavens above?

The story is complete.
Warning: Tagged 18+ for violence.
By the author of The Blue Mage Raised by Dragons

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GloriousLABDA
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Surprisingly good, actually.

I read "Blue Mage Raised by Dragons" and I absolutely loved it. I loved the almost constant humour throughout the story and the more character-focused narrative, even though the plot itself was mediocre at best.  So when I saw Virlyce was busy writing another story I immediately followed it and imagined it would be more of the same but in a different setting. When I found out that "Demon's Journey" was a much more serious story than "Blue Mage", once can imagine I was a tad disappointed. I was almost tempted to not read it and look for something else, but, in the end, I thought 'what the heck, I'll give it a chance' and I'm glad I did.

 

World and Story:

 

The setting is easy enough for those that have read "The Lazy King" or anything similar. There is a world with demons whose personality, lifestyle and entire being are dedicated to their 'sin', like lust, pride, gluttony etc., and there is a world with angels who are the same as demons but have 'virtues' instead of sins. Now I for one loved "The Lazy King", so seeing this setting return was a joy for me and one of the reasons I decided to read it despite it not being what I expected, but there are some things that irk me. For example, the angels have multiple virtues and most also have one sin despite the demons (so far) having only one sin. Why? Well, I don't know. It hasn't been explained yet. But even if the explanation is the best in the world it won't change that the thing I liked most about "The Lazy King" were the supposedly one-dimensional characters having more complexity than expected, so I found it a bit sad to see that idea not present in the story. Then again, this is not "The Lazy King", so as long as this will be explained, I'm fine with it.

 

The story itself is easily summarized: a certain brother, a demon of pride, swallows his pride to save his sister, a glutton, from certain death. It is a concise and simple premise and I like it. So, yeah, that's it.

4 stars.

 

Style:

 

As mentioned above, I expected another comedy from Virlyce, since his style seemed to be made for it. His style is rather fast-paced and has little to no 'fluff' aside from the occasional adjective, which fits a comedy since you want to get to the joke quickly before the reader gets bored, but feels kind of dull and empty when describing a journey to and through another world.  then again, this is something that most RRL authors suffer from, so I won't punish it too harshly by putting a one star, but still.

3.5 stars.

 

Grammar:

 

As long as I don't get a headache trying to decipher the meaning of every sentence, I don't really care about grammar.

5 stars.

 

Characters

 

Palan is a bloodthirsty demon of pride desperately trying to save his sister, even going so far as to swallow his pride and entering a contract with an angel. Of course his pride won't allow him to admit this and instead he works out his frustrations by threatening and sometimes eating other creatures. His contractor, Raea, is an angel of kindness and patience who was banished to serve as a lieutenant in some backwater castle because in the capital angels with sin aren't allowed. I like both characters even if they weren't paired together, but I especially like the chemistry between these two as they journey together alongside Raea's subordinates and especially Owen, on whom Palan always seeks to vent his frustrations on.

4.5 stars.

 

Conclusion:

 

I wanted to give this story an overall score of 4 stars, but for some reason, despite  some gripes I have with the story and the style, I enjoyed more than I thought I would. Why? I honestly don't know. Perhaps it is because recently I can't seem to find anything worthwhile to read, or perhaps it is because maybe the author enjoys writing and shows it by challenging himself to write something outside of his previously established "Blue Mage" comfort zone. Either way, this story is definitely something worth reading, especially if you, like me, are bored sloths.

4.5 stars

 

(Reviewed as of Chapter 24)

vipekoi
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A good story full of potential

The story does not have heavy info dump which is seen in many stories which destroys the flow of the story. Information about the world is slowly revealed through our MC.  There is so many things we don´t know how works yet. but the story has a really good setup. So far this has been very good, and it has a lot of potential.

Fablecrusher
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Spicy with a hint of claws

Let me preface this little review by stating that everyone is entitled to their own opinion, but I do feel that people could and should take away some things from this analysis.

 

This is written as chapter 24 has been released, thereby dating it.

 

Style

Writing style is something is quite hard to improve and therefore hardly is. Keeping this in mind, I am rather pleased with the style the author has adopted, which is one of  necessary descriptions and informative dialogue. The reason I have not marked this with 5 stars, is simply because the style is good, but quite unnoteworthy. Not that that's a negative thing, but it simply does not grasp your attention or visibly improve the story.

 

Story

The story is where the author shines. Even though there are some cliché elements to be found, like the doting brother- thing, most are quickly negated by adding certain factors. In this case it would be the demonic nature of the brother, making him seem like he had no real choice personality-wise. These little justifications save the story from the inevitable cliché-storm of madness that so many writers find themselves in.

 

Grammar

Grammar is quite similar to the style, in the way that it is quite unnoteworthy. However, because of some lovely language and some beautiful grammar-structures, it is more noticeable than its predecessor. All in all, a lovely read with no annoying interruptions by giant crevices of grammatical errors.

 

Character

As grammar was similar to Style, Characters are quite similar to Story, besides their obvious relation. The idea that demons are all attributed with a sin is very interesting and can be exploited numerous times to create new story elements, but it can also lead to some easy stereotypes, which in turn can lead to the feared clichés. Again, up until now there has been a good justification for those bumps in the otherwise flat road, but I can't help but fear that the author may slip up. My personal view also dictates that a few more main characters need to be introduced soon, or the story may focus too heavily on a single aspect, which in turn could lead to dragging on.

 

All in all, thusfar it has been an amazing read. Little things that are not even negative, but are more likely to hold the promise of errors, can be found but nothing major.

 

If you enjoy creative and non-linear stories based around demons, angels and a general criticism on both humanity and its supposed values, you will love this story. The author is clearly skilled in their art and you will be waiting anxiously for a new chapter, as soon as you're done reading. (Just like me right now)

Crimefridge
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Unintentional Comedy- pretty good, but beware end

Demon's Journey is one of those stories that you look at the cover and think it's probably a joke. You see the author's page and you think since it's listed as hiatus, it probably was left incomplete and so it was mediocre.

It actually turned out pretty well. The characters are very solid, the plot doesn't feel too rushed or too slow. The best element overall is probably the humor. And most of all, it may be listed as Hiatus, but it is in fact Completed.

Enjoyable story. There was one joke that was a little fourth-wall breaking, but it never happened again. The greatest negative of the story is probably the ending and chapters leading up to the end.

So, overall, A Demon's Journey was a pretty decent read, nothing astronomical or fancy, but an enjoyable overall experience. Not without its flaws, but not without its charm either.

And lets be real, a Completed story of any reasonable caliber on RRL is pretty damn rare.

shahifaqeer
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Their skin is purple 
Veins crawl across their skin like vines
Their builds slim but rippling with muscles
They approach

Their eyes glow red
Color of blood from a beating heart
Pumping pumping pumping
They glow brighter as they spot their prey

rctsj
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Great story at the point of this review (Ch. 68)

Definitely warrants giving it a try. Has its own unique take on transmigration and the demon-angel relationship.

 

LyFe of Chaos
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Waited till after 6 chapters to rate. It's off to a great start with an interesting story line/plot, strong MC and a fun premise. Good grammar (to be expected from virlyce) and style. Looking forward to more :)

Kap
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I enjoyed Blue Mage Raised by Dragons. For me it had just the right mix of crazy characters and fantasy landscape. That said, this is so much better. Everyone's personalities feel so natural and I am loving how the characters play off each other. There are a couple typos here and there, but nothing that can't be fixed with a decent editor and certainly nothing I haven't seen in professionally published works.  I can't wait how the characters world evolves. 

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If you carefully read the synopsis then you will immediately discover the striking irony of the story which is only the tip of the ice berg. This is an excellent story where we have quirky angels, pure hearted demons and the most unbelievably unique MC of Royal road. 

 

So all I can say is READ THE AWESOME STORY

J1st
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An enjoyable Web Serial.

This review is written as of chapter 352's release.

Grammar:

By and large there are no real problems with the Grammar in the novel. Errors are few and far between with few egregious issues or misspellings. The author manages to stay consistent in both tense and perspective, which puts it above most other novels on this site.

Style:

If I had a bone to pick with this novel, this is where I would lodge my primary complaint: the chapter release format. The author updates daily, but in chapters of 1-2k words. Each individual chapter feels like part of a scene, but the pacing is thrown off by the constant breaks and cliffhangers. It almost feels like an old cartoon serial where the ending would be cut off and quickly pasted into the first 5-10 minutes of the next episode. For some chapters this isn't an issue, but when a single “scene” is broken up into multiple parts each with cliffhangers, it can get quite tiresome to read. It almost feels like the author isn't confident enough in the quality of their story, and as a result is chopping up chapters in order to keep a daily release schedule for their audience so that they don't get bored.

That all being said, the author does make the most out of the rather limited word count per chapter he has forced upon himself, his writing style is very light on exposition, and dialogue strikes an even balance between informative and brief. The author economizes their prose very well, knowing where and when to extrapolate in order to cement the reader's understanding of the scene and its actors. While not particularly astounding, the author's writing style gets the job done. Its possible that if the chopped chapters were to be combined into more cohesive segments, issues would begin to appear, but as it stands, there is little to complain about.

Story:

I won't go in depth on the story of this web novel because the doing so would involve a significant amount of spoilers, but it suffices to say that the author so far has managed to consistently shake things up and keep the story fresh while dodge cliché plot lines and dead-ends.

Character:

I'm going to be honest, when I initially looked at this webnovel I did not have high expectations. In my experience, most web novels that feature demons & angels have a tendency to struggle heavily with characterization. Angels and demons are portrayed as flat uninteresting characters, their personality consisting solely caricature of their given virtue or vice. Any growth or change that they undergo is rarely due to their own agency and often stems from some sort of “corruption” or unhealthy “yandere” type relationship. Demon's Journey is refreshing in that it manages to add actual depth to its main characters – their “sins” and “virtues” come from their personality and experiences. Although they are influenced by their alignment, they refrain from descending into cliché one-note muppets incapable of expressing more than one emotion at a time. Whatever got you interested in the novel, its ultimately the character dynamics between the two leads that really keeps you interested.

Conclusion:

This is one of my favorite webnovels on RR and one of the better webnovels I've read overall. I doubt I'll ever read it more than once, but the fact that the author managed to take a difficult setting and wrangle good and interesting characters out of it without being another brain-dead power fantasy will always stick in my mind when I think of good internet fiction. It's a shame that it is ranked as lowly as it is on the website, and I suspect its partly due to its format. Still, with some additional work, polish, and an editor, I could easily see this story hitting the front page of RR, and I hope that the author manages to finish the story while maintaining its consistent quality.