Spectral Regalia

Just cleaned up the review a bit as to let it have more sense to new readers.

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For those of you looking for a romance novel, you might want to skip out, or grit your teeth through it and see if the author actually plans to have actual romance in story past Chpt. 60.

I’ll start off with what made me really lose it.

The part where the MC and two of his companions go to a dragons cave. 

Basically, the MC and Co are going to take a "treasure" from said Dragon.

Now you should note that one, according to this fic, just ONE dragon has the potential to turn a continent into a wasteland of endless death and destruction and go back to sleep like it was nothing. The other races could literally do NOTHING to stop it and the Angel and Demon race would walk out and leave the other races to their fate.

And you know what the MC decides to do? Pull the wool over the dragon's eyes, his companions, and then activate some retarded trap for NO REASON (he already has the treasure by this point). And you know what the trap does!? Give the dragon and his so called "companions" (read: People that we're warming up to him) an NON FATAL electric shock.

Does this piss off the dragon?

You bet your ass.

Does the dragon flip out with a fury looking for the MC?

NO!

Why?

I don't know! For whatever reason, the dragon just roars in anger then goes back to sleep! There was absolutely NO REASON for the dragon not going out of it's mountain and to KILL the MC because he has the treasure, which by the way, the dragon was guarding due to it being "EVIL".

This is not the only scene the should be raising red flags for this story for you.

There's also the fact that he's set up as "General" of a space fleet. (Shouldn't it be Admiral at the very least? Or Space Commander?). Meaning he should be a mature adult right? Nope. The MC acts like a bipolar teenage girl on her period. I WISH I was joking! The MC goes on this tirade of saying how he's "so emotionless" then the next moment decides to flip the fuck out. This especially relates to this lion-like monster he encounters in the beginning. Already, this whole trait of him being "emotionless" is falling apart and because of this, there is no character growth so the MC remains a dickweed all through out even in Chpt 90+

Then the author tries to ease this off by making him feel guilty about the dragon scene a chapter later. You know, the part where he MIGHT have killed his companions in the dragons den? By the way, he has no way of knowing if their alive or not! Oh, oh! Let's not forget to mention one of those companions is the GRANDDAUGHTER of his martial arts teacher! And all he gets is to squirm for one paragraph before moving on to the next plot device?

All this is annoying because the author played it like he was starting to be nice and warm up to the companions before the MC just throws them off a cliff.

Okay, fine. Play him as a douche. But then don’t try and give him a conscience, then just drop off said conscience aside.

Frankly, I think we need to be stricter with the romance tag as there is ZERO romance all the way to chapter 59. Yes, girls are “fawning” over him, but since he’s not even engaging in it, heck, even dropping (romanced) established side characters off a cliff, well, that doesn’t seem the lease bit romantic does it? Especially to people wanting to read a romance-genred novel.

Honestly, the author has potential in his writing. His world building is truly fantastic. But the story reads like a wet dream (Encounters ninja clan early on? Really? And gets trained by them?).

All in all, great start. That's all. Nothing to complain about your style or grammar, however the heart and soul of your fic, your story and characters, needs work.(READ: Characters are ABYSMAL. If I could put a negative score for it, it would be a -10.) Quite a lot really. Hell, if it was me, I'd rewrite the whole thing. Make the MC more likable. Make use of the romance tag or just drop it all together if you're going with "Hates women" trait of the MC.

A very interesting story, keeps me wanting more and more. MC is likable and cool, background history quite detailed and the pace is great. Keep up the good work ^^

It was great read for me but eventually I grew tired of reading it don't get me wrong it's a great read but I can't get into it

Story:

The setup to the story is quite unique, where someone from the future gets send into the past. The backstory provided at the start of the novel is really detailed. The progression of the Story mostly makes sense and is entertaining. However the inclusion of God (the one from the MC's world) makes it harder for the reader to be in suspense. If something goes terribly wrong God comes along and fixes it.

It seems the author did at least some research in the topc he brings up during his story, no "we need a hyperbolic funtion to timetravel" which is good.

Also very nice is the diversity of experiences you will get. The different jobs he takes promise a mirriad of different feels you will get out of the story.

The Character/s

The MC has some real issues with his obsession on taking revenge on people who don't really deserve it, which hurts his overall believability, since he usually is very pragmatic, levelheaded and takes the way of least resistance. While his levelheadedness and pragmatism makes it harder to really feel/root for the character, he is still likeable enough.

Many (not all) of the side characters, especially the female ones, remembered me about your standart animecharacters.you have the quieter girl that wants the best for everyone and tries to listen to all sides, you have 2 Tsunderes. Later you have the fanatic loyal underling etc. Its not a bad thing though, those characters seem to work well together especially during the last few chapters (ca. ch 78)

With 2 Tsunderes, there is the possibility for a harem but since the MC is a bit thick (and has some other issues)  it sadly never came to any notable romance, we will see what the future holds.

Conclusion

This project is def. better than the sum of its parts. it is entertaining enough to pass the time. but dont expect any big emotions out of it. All in all i can recommend to give it a shot.

I've been waiting for months to read the next chapter. I have been following this series for about a year now and don't want you to put it down. please come back.

First things first, this is the kind of story I really enjoy. The MC is capable of killing just about anyone, and the story's progression is easy to follow while the side characters fall into familiar archetypes. This being so, it also is true that this story suffers from poor grammar in places and relatively static characters.

As many others have stated previously, the prologue was probably the thing that drew me in most to this story with a very fleshed out basis and an interesting take on the reincarnation trope. The character, rather than being a NEET who ended his life unfulfilled and saving a stranger by giving up his own life, he is a general being executed for genocide. It was by far the most compelling intro to a story on RR that I have seen. 

In terms of the story, as I stated above, it is the kind of story that I enjoy, so I am biased in my opinion, but I truly find that fictions with easy to follow storylines tend to be my favorites. 

For grammar, I am sure that I don't need to elaborate too much on this one. Its not good. There's a lot to work on, but I also view this as one of the least important parts of the review, as for me personally grammar doesn't effect my understanding of the story or my enjoyment of the story.

Characters for the most part are also easy to understand which isn't a bad thing. The bad part is the fact that the characters, especially our exceptional MC, don't progress in terms of their character. This is disappointing, and I feel one of the most important things the author should focus on. More about his past coming to haunt him. And I don't just mean in his dreams, but also in his daily interactions and his general view of people.

Overall, this fiction is definitely greater than the sum of it's parts, which is why it has a 4 and not a three. for me, even though there are some parts of the fiction I think can really be worked on, I still really enjoy it and can still feel immersed in the story. Thank you so much for writing this Zephon, I hope that this story is nowhere near complete because I want to learn so much more about this world! 

So in the beginning I really enjoyed the pace and writing of this story. The MC has great potential for growth. Tragedies turn me off, but this was done in a tasteful manner.

The writing has slowly improved while the pace may be “slow” it’s actually very well done due to proper chapter lengths (yes not some bs 1k words) which let details and the story flow out well.

Formatting has slowly improved which is a huge bonus.

However after 50+ chapters and recently with 49-52 I became incredibly disappointed. The character has experience 0 growth. I’m not talking about strength/power, but personality, interaction, it all becomes static and down right annoying.

The MC with all this potential somehow stays full douchebage thru 50 chapters, which honestly speaking conflict with how he was first portrayed. Is the MC a good person? Probably not, but he just became a douche and stayed a douche with no REAL reason. None, his actions don’t relfect anything he should be or should’ve become…

What’s worse is the MC has goals, goals he clearly stats out, but somehow when he interacts with other characters the throws all logic out and “forgets” these goals and becomes an asshole? And not a asshole character with good reason, or asshole becomes the story creates a world in which he should be an asshole, but just because… well i don’t know he’s just an asshole.

In short… what was once a story of great potential with its characters has made me wanna drop this, but for now I’ll wait till author flushes the story out more (again) till i pick it up and read it.

I’ll say this the author has stuck to his guns so he has guts, I cannot penalize him for his writing, which I enjoy in itself.

Hello… I have returned muhaha…. anyway a lot of things sure have happened when I was gone. Life has really been very cruel to me these past few months, my plan was to update my review at least once a month but then again some things just don’t go on according to what you plan. You sure have leveled up, putting some artworks and even having an artist eh? Anyway… lets start with some reviewing.

Your style has been quite good for a while right now… not too shabby and not too jargon if you ask me, but to put it bluntly it’s too simple. Try to have some times where you put in a good chunk of mystery for the readers to make them curious… add a bit of idiomatic expressions in some situation to make the story flow a bit smoother… also try to do what others call “show not tell” show not tell more or less means that do not try to narrate the events that happen by the omnipotent third person but instead show the events by perspective of a character (either the main or the supporting or maybe just some background characters) Expecting some good things from you, all of the above are just advices from a lowly mortal so even if you did not heed it you lose nothing.

The story is flowing quite nice and still have that one interesting aspect I like, you know that one aspect? It’s the hundred or maybe even thousand of possibilities present in your story that is. It is certain that our MC will be stronger than those deities but still… I am very curious about what he will do then after, will he become a tyrant that abuses his strenght or will he become a saint that will try to improve the lives of the poor and stabilize the lives of the rich? or will he become a reclusive hermit that continuosly aim for pointless invincibility? or shall he became all of the above with the hint of madness? oh before I forgot, try to add a bit of comedy to lighten the mood sometimes alright?

Grammar. Well well well… look at you, just a short amount of time I was gone and you already had those PRs… damn quite a long time ago when I tried to write my own fiction no one even tried to correct my inconsistent grammar and here look at you, you already had your own PRs and even had an artist (I am definitely not jealous) haha anyway, Still seeing some typos here and there also names must always start with a capital letter, nothing too serious but I prefer to read a fiction with perfect basic grammar. Also the reason I did not make it five star is not because of the previously said inconsistence but instead you lack the good portion of idiomatic expression, did you know that idiomatic expressions are sometimes the thing I love about a story?

Character – I already know why the attitude of the MC was like that in the beginning arc from the start as it felt a bit forced from my perspective but still quite acceptable as you fooled a good amount of readers and even created some haters. The two reasons why I said from my previous review is that the characters are normal is because I did not want to spoil the surprise you’re gonna give the readers that did not found out and also it is really normal by my opinion. Think… by all of billion peoples you got picked and given a second chance to live by an almighty being also having an ability that can nearly do everything you think of as long as you understand it… wouldn’t you feel a bit special? I mean can you really maintain that good samaritan attitude? anyway enough of this topic. Do you also notice that the character store sheet is missing a star? because frankly I was very disapointed with some developments that you proposed and added in the story… I will not disclose those developments as I am only a reviewer not an editor and also it might only be my opinion, but please I tell you… If you’re planning to publish this as a book then watch out for those kinds of development.

Then… I may be gone for a long time, longer than my last disappearance because of certain reasons… but I will try to take a glimpse at your fiction once in a while to see if you at least heed my advices but most of all I still like your fiction… Sorry If there is any kind of typos or inconsistence in my grammar for I wrote this review in my phone and there is no grammar check in my phone… Till then I guess?

Like it.

Interesting start, a good read.

But hope the main character doesn't get to fast to op.

Definitely one of the most well thought out novels here. Pace is good. Lacks a bit of romance.

one thing

u sometimes use an approxiamtion like "around 89%"

or "around 16 minutes".

use a round number for a approx. like 90% or 15 mins.