The Eagle's Flight

by Quill

Original Adventure Drama Fantasy Historical Multiple Lead Characters Strategy Supernatural

The king is dead; his heir is too young to assume the throne. Jarl Vale wants to become Lord Protector, spurred by his ambitious brother Konstans. Jarl Isarn likewise seeks this power; he is aided – or thwarted – by the return of his brother, the knight and war hero Athelstan, whose squire, Brand, hopes to restore his family’s fortunes, cost what it may. Through all of this, an enigmatic traveller makes plans with jarls, scribes, and priests for his own purpose. Abroad, powerful forces sense division in the realms of Adalmearc and make their own plans. It is only a matter of time before schemes clash, plots collide, and conflict erupts. War is on the horizon.

Story updates every second Wednesday with a new chapter from the second book of the series. The first book can be downloaded as an ebook from my site, where a map of the world can be viewed. The site also contains other background information such as history of the realms, pantheon and religion, calendar etc.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. Journey's End ago
2. When Eagles Sleep ago
3. Young Man's Folly ago
4. Rats Will Reign ago
5. Midsummer Sun ago
6. The Voice of the Adalthing ago
7. A Highland Tale ago
8. Ælfwine ago
9. The Long Watch ago
10. The Bonds That Bind Us ago
11. Men May Ride ago
12. But the Raven Will Fly ago
13. Sigvard's Blood ago
14. Bated Breath ago
15. The Dragons of Wyrmpeak ago
16. A Breach of Sanctity ago
17. Night of the Knife ago
18. Ember and Ash ago
19. City of Circles ago
20. City of Daggers ago
21. Taverns and Palaces ago
22. In Salt and Wine ago
23. City of Lies ago
24. A Clash of Colours ago
25. The Last Calm ago
26. City of Divines ago
27. Secrets in the Night ago
28. Movements in Shadow and Light ago
29. A Lordly Gift ago
30. City under Siege ago
31. Days of the Raven ago
32. Subterfuge ago
33. Sacred ago
34. The Fruits of Treachery ago
35. The Small Leak ago
36. The Unbidden Guest ago
37. Relief ago
38. Tread Lightly ago
39. From Foe to Friend ago
40. The Seat of Power ago
41. The Will That Moves ago
42. The Dead of Night ago
43. Niðing ago
44. Knights and Jarls ago
45. Sharpen the Sword ago
46. A Masterful Play ago
47. Wolf and Lion ago
48. The Velvet Glove ago
49. The Greater Foe ago
50. The Right Dagger ago
51. From Friend to Foe ago
52. The Spoils of Peace ago
53. Atheling ago
54. Dreams ago
55. Flesh and Spirit ago
56. Salt and Swords ago
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BookWorm84
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Epic, Professional Quality Story!

Don't be misled by the low chapter count. Each chapter is close to 10k or more words.

This is my initial review:

Character development 5/5

This is real fantasy writing. The world is developed and interactive. This story does not seem to rely on an overpowered MC and instead is introducing each pawn and piece as a connected puzzle. Well done and I am enjoying the character interactions in-spite of a slower opening than some might choose.

Grammar 5/5

Can I score this 10/5? Found 1 error in 20k words. This is professionally edited level of work.

Story 5/5

I thought about knocking it for a slow start but then realized that I was still sucked in. All the exciting elements are developing (War, Politics, Greed) and by the end of even the first chapter it begins to come together in a rather fun way.

Style 5/5

Some will dock this part becuase of pacing. I find I do not mind its slower start and epic level story telling. Give it a shot, it might surprise you. (I am, however, a fast reader.)

 

Good luck to the author! Keep the posts coming.

 

Critique:

It might help to seperate point of view shifts into their own smaller chapters to break up the flow. I found my attention drifting for a monent at each transition because I didn't always catch the POV shift. (Totally common for nearly every story.)

Sp? X1 (Practice not practise).

Beautiful descriptions. Sometimes the tone can be majority-passive so be careful with that.

Practice fight scene showed good promise with fight scripting. Looking forward to see how you handle skirmishes and wars.

WhoCares
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Perfect grammar and worldbuilding.

Pros: Super long chaps. Great worldbuilding and - get this - legit perfect grammar. I mean, not the "oh it's great by this site's standards" kinda grammar but legit, professional quality grammar. The style flows well, if a little purple-y. The story is interesting, though it relies more on the amazing world building than on character development.

Cons: Kinda slow but worth it for the immersion. Author needs to add more tags. Characters could use some more depth and distinguising features.

Will change this to a longer advanced review once more chapters are out (even though it's already 200 pages long lol. It's slow k?) Good luck to the author! WC Approved ^-^

m45halo45m
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chapters are long but not tiring the grammar is perfect as far as i can see the story is slow but still keeps you engaged and i couldent stop myself from reading characters just look at bookworm84 review he described it perfectly and the story is already finished and available on the author site so no need to worry about the story being dropped 

this story feels like a real novel written by a professional rather than the normal amature storys on RRL defenetly should give it a try!

Andre27
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Pretty much as Flawless as it'll get

Not very good at writing reviews, but I think this story definetly deserves one so I'll leave my first review here I think. 

 

Grammar: 

So far in the 5 chapters ive read I have encountered no real mistakes at all as far as I have noticed, the only ones that I have noticed being ones like forgetting a quotation mark at the start or end of a sentence and even that is 3 or maybe 4 that I have noticed in 5 very long chapters. I might also have seen 1 letter being forgotten in some word somewhere in there but I couldn't find that anymore after rechecking so IDK really. 

 

Style: 

The style of writing is very descriptive of mostly the enviroment aswell as what the characters are doing but less so of character appearances and their thoughts that they keep to themselves. Which I personally find quite enjoyable, atleast for this kind of story with a lot of different characters who we follow and no real MC. Which leads me to the next point...

 

Characters: 

In this story we follow quite a few characters, persepctives and "sub-stories". Off the top of my head I think I can count atleast 8 different main perspectives and characters/character groups we have followed so far. And all of the characters feel like real people with real motivations, with most of those for the benefit of themselves or their families but some also working for more selfless purposes. So far I like all the characters we have encountered both in their personalities and how well they are written. I imagine as I read further I will probably start to favor certain characters more and hope for their success while hoping others fail, but I think I will always enjoy all them as characters even if I would never agree with them as people. 

 

Story: 

I cant yet say much about the story, seeing as so far it has been just getting familiar with the characters and understanding their motives and some of the world they live in. But from what I have understood so far the story should be quite intriguing and fluid with war looming and many different factions wishing to gain the ultimate power in the realm while the heir to the throne is too young to rule. 

Also while I said we have quite a few sub-stories I think that might be a bit misleading actualy, seeing as they will probably still be quite fleshed out and intriguing, just that they might not affect the world or realm as a whole really. 

Pesky elven shapeshifters aswell, fierce and dangerous creatures. 

 

One small thing might be that sometimes it seems that the perspective changes from one character to another after they interact with eachother, without the little line skip to signify that. Sometimes that is a bit confusing but usualy it only seems to be for maybe 1 or 2 sentences before it becomes quite clear that there has been a change. I might also just be misunderstanding something too, but it somewhat feels like this happens a few times atleast.

 

Also while others have pointed out that the story might be slower than others, I honestly feel like that isnt the case. While there isn't much action or anything like that and the chapters are very long, I still feel like much more happens and we learn much more in a lot fewer words than in other stories. Even if those other stories might have a lot of action in those words instead. 

 

F.Dj
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Top Class Fiction!!!

Style; 5/5

The story is very well written and the plots are very well build, richly thick with a fluid flow. The storytelling style is superb, I dare say it is the best in RRL, something you can expect from someone with a literature degree. He had his freaking ways with words, you will unconsciously immerse yourself and drawn into the story. Unlike reading an amateur work, instead it felt like reading a professional work, freaking excellent! And you missed this fic for a subpar crap fictions?! Then you're a total retard!

 

Story; 5/5

The story are about political struggles, intrics, wars, love, live and much more. It has a vibe like Game of Throne but more conservative. It also has surprising accuracy about medieval times, something I have never seen before in RRL or in other. Even lord of the ring had miniscule accuracy, the wars and the fights felt like a joke, just a pure fantasy. A proof that the author had give times for research and had advance knowledge about history. Something that I highly appreciated!

The Eagle's Flight have the most brilliant plots building compared to any in RRL, one of the best I've ever read. Its so rich, thick, and perfectly crafted. I've tried to nitpick it and I can't even find any fault. Its definitely the work of professional, not an amateur! You won't find any bullshit here, just a pure excellent literacy.

 

Grammar; 5/5

Perfect, nuff said. I'm not even a native English speaker, duh. 

 

Character; 5/5

They are alive, each one of them are unique and very well built. The psychological touch is superb, another point that I highly appreciated. When you immerse yourself with them you can feels their emotions, their struggles, their life, its so damn amazing. They all felt so real. In term of character building, only The Wandering Inn may came close to it.

 

Conclusion; 5/5

This is the highest quality story in RRL, none can compare. It has the best historical accuracy and superb psychological touch. This story makes most of the fics on the charts looks like thrash.

Necamijat
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The Eagle's Flight soars above the norm of this site

What can I say? This is a professional-level work done by someone who clearly put his mind and soul into building it. But, just to sate the average reader's curiosity...

Grammar: easily a 5. If I have encountered a grammar error, it would probably be one every ten thousand words if that.

Style: Quill's writing is descriptive where it needs to be, yet concise and upfront when the situation calls for it. Every chapter brings its own charm and every landscape is described well. There is some minute inkling of purple prose, but they are weaved perfectly to not stand out.

Story: Even in the first few chapters, it is evident that the world of Adalmearc has been thought through. The intrigue and political play that happens, in the beginning, is designed in a believable way, yet is easy to grasp to those that do not hold much knowledge in it. I, for example, scrolled through the chapters in anticipation of what would happen.

Character: The characters are believable. Three-dimensional. Not clichés. A welcome sight after the Dungeon stories, litRPG, and OP that RRL is usually known for.

The Eagle's Flight is a high-fantasy novel, one of the few on RRL, and furthers RRL's ambition into branching out for serious work. As such, I can only urge people to check this novel out. Even if it isn't for everyone's liking, much can be learnt if you're looking to broaden your writing abilities.

maelos61
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I absolutely love your story and the only reason why it isn't at the top yet is probably because it picks up a bit slower than most stories on this site. Once it does pick up you're in for an awesome read though. I hope you'll continue writing and I for one can't wait to read the next chapter. Good luck with writing and please continue producing such quality work.

Ice.Beyond
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PEN IS MIGHTER THAN A SWORD.

Your novel so far just wow !! just wow !! I must say I feel like being a kid again, I use to play with sticks imagining a tactical medieval warfare. How did I do that ? I dont know anymore. It feels like your novel has that kind of feeling. You characters and are much more alive than people I see in the streets every single day. 

I am a galactic Explorer, a visionarist and a gentleman.  Sleep -> Eat -> Work -> be happy <-- Repeat our everyday life.

Mouse the Dog
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A Riveting Tale of Unmatched Quality

A story of twisted politics fueled by a convoluted and intricate motives, the author brilliantly develops an incredible and thoroughly developed world. A clear cut above everything else on this platform, "The Eagle's Flight" is the closest thing to perfection in every category. While this story begins with a heavy focus on politics, the story is told on a very personal level, close to the characters, creating a riveting dynamic between disloyalties and motives. I am hopeful that as the political strife begins to be sorted out, an even greater plane of war and struggle will continue - equally maintaining the brilliant storytelling and quality it has delivered so far.

The style is well thought out. At times slightly archaic, other times humorous or even blunt and to the point, the author delivers his story through a perfect blend of individuality and familiarity.

The story as miles ahead of the rest - even better than many professional fantasy novel. The reader must pay attention; the chapters are very long, and every part affects the rest of the story. The story is told through a third person personal narrator that seperately follows the "players" within the story, slowly setting the stage and completing the picture for the reader. Watching the story come together is a masterpiece, and the depth is astounding - unmatched, even. 

The author provides extensive background information on his world on his website to further complete the world he has built. For all those readers out there that love to pay attention to detail, this is the perfect story for you.

I will not say much about the grammar, other than it is almost impeccable. I have not found any mistakes, although I am sure there may be a few lurking about. This is of very little importance, however - as I have said, I have not found any.

The characters are brilliant. Varied and each with their own story, they all play a role within the world. And that is the most important thing: they are not just vital to the story, but they are all vital to the world they are in. Every single character feels like they have the power to change something, to be active within this world. They are not passive actors, they are not supplementary characters to a main character; they are their own person. This dynamic is simply amazing, especially considering the fact that there are so many - which makes the style and story simply that much more impressive.

All in all, I must say that even if you may not find this the most enjoyable fantasy novel because of the attention to detail that it requires, it will most definitely be the story of highest quality, of the most delicate balance and brilliant delivery on this site.

djeruknipis
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Do consider my other reviews to have some inkling as to how I like to weigh my stars. That said, this novel is fantastic! The story woven bewitchingly. You can root not just one, or two, characters, but you got the whole score of them. When they found triumph, you cheer. When they suffer a set back, you weep with them. Inside your heart, at the very least. I simply afraid when one of them, through the fickleness of fate (read: author design), must face one another. In such inevitable, I must prepare to have hopes dashed, dreams crashed.

Good notes I like to point out, I finished the first third of the novel and in total I found 3 grammar mistakes. How about that. It's near perfect! Then the characters, oh they're all charming. They are responsible and have wit above them. And when romance blossoms between them, hopes are filled to the brim, along with blessing. When they have to part, sadness follows. And this novel is not even about romance, it's about politics. I'll say it again, how about that, this is fantastic!

The story flow flawlessly. When I finished the first arc, I plan to wait a week at least so that I prepare to face the hard work of getting used to the new beginning. I start the next day however, and lo, no such reservation needed. The story grips me from the very start. No chance to stop and try to comprehend what new rules are at play. They all come with such an ease. If you have reservation in starting a new read, you can do away with it with this novel!

A note for the author. I don't feel the strong foundation of Langstan. Sure, there are enemies to the south east, just like our China has enemies to their north. But unlike China with its Great Wall, Adalmearc does not have great economy to have it financed. Thousands miles of wall should have great population (and their trade of various merchandise and grain) backing them. Royalties, should first be overflowing with gold. So far, I feel your world situation is close to the world of Westeros of ASOIAF, not that many coin change hands nor that many peasants mobilised. I hope you stress them more in the coming opportunities. (Or if you have, please do forgive me, I haven't finished everything here).