The Breath of Creation

by lightningwarrior21

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Magic Martial Arts Multiple Lead Characters Reader interactive Reincarnation Strong Lead Summoned Hero Supernatural Wuxia

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Sometimes, the multiverse needs expanding. That's where I come in. But, unfortunately, being a deity isn't all fun and games (and is incredibly complicated), as there are always things working against you. Not even the God of the Multiverses can change that. 

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Twelve souls were chosen to expand into the void surrounding the known universe(s), and were given a grace period in which they would experience a relatively safe expansion of their domains. Once that period is up, however, they are free to interact with each other...and what lurks in the depths of the Abyss, the Void, and the Primordial Chaos. I am one of those souls. And let me tell you, this shit ain't easy. Between trying to raise mortals into an immortal army, with which I can defend my domain, dealing with my children, and trying to maintain the balance between all realms of existance, I have my work cut out for me. Sigh. Now I know why, back on Earth, gods worked in mysterious, invisible ways. There's just too much to be done. 

Formerly called RE: Deity

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
And He Said... ago
The Four Realms ago
The Importance of Names ago
The Birth of the Fae ago
The Path to Immortality ago
Deities and Sentient Races ago
The Truth of Cultivation ago
How DARE You?! ago
Buckling Down to Work ago
The Path of Dei ago
Power Versus Force ago
The First Clash ago
Fate ago
Immortals ago
The Awakening (Nine Thousand Years) ago
Starting the Battle ago
This Is How High the Heavens Are ago
The Fate of the Realm Sun ago
Aftermath ago
Tian ago
Dragons and Draconians ago
On Domains and Lessons ago
Just a Bit Further ago
Learning of Hearth and Home ago
Speaking With the Creator ago
Unexpected Events ago
The Wedding ago
Whoever You Are ago
The Mad Scientist and The Meeting ago
Introductions (Names and Domains) ago
Comparisons ago
The Nine Heavens ago
The Wheel Realm ago
The One World ago
Paragon of His Species ago
Big, Happy, Family ago
Welcoming Change ago
Farewells ago
Side Story: First Contact ago
Like Parent, Like Child ago
The More Things Change... ago
...The More They Stay the Same ago
The First Dimension ago
A Long Day for Everyone ago
The Song ago
Names are Hard ago
Revisiting Old Faces ago
Mortality and Destroying Faith ago
CH-CH-CH-CHANGES! ago
Character Glossary ago
And the Music Began to Play ago
The Rise ago
Playing with Trees ago
So Far Away ago
The Rising Sun ago
A Coming Break ago
Interlude: Various Perspectives ago
Dancing In the Moonlight ago
Little Heart ago
The Calamitous Calamity ago
Together, We Are Strong ago
Starman ago
New Additions ago
Pillars and Empire ago
Advancements ago
The Ancients ago
Bombshell ago
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Jormungand
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Such beautiful and profound story

this is how or what god should be.. not some lame childish ass kicking feeling melodramatic god that we could read in a lot novel... THIS is much more!! the concept of a being and the gods and itus own people.. chaos and all!!! such a great concept!!! please do continue on!!!

loregram
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Well written story which draws you in

Overall, this story is quite well done. The author succeeded in blending Xianxia/Xianhuan concepts (i.e. IET's works and general constructs of the genre) with more western conceps as well as concepts from major religions around the world (e.g. reincarnation, God, agents of God, etc.) . In addition, the author took these small parts of other's ideas and mixed them together and made a unique world. In doing this the author managed to avoid expounding on something they didn't understand well which would make them sound facile, and instead made up something of their own so it can be colored in the author's own way.

The MC acts as a what I think many have hoped to see, a god who does what they must with exceptions (rather than being absurdly whymsical => too far removed from reality) without being a complete control freak, "I'm better than everyone else" and the general psychosis you see in MCs in Xianxia.

The only real lack that I have seen so far is that while character's have been given names (and what they represent), so far they have not been fleshed out too much, though I suppose there is plenty of chapters left for that to be filled in.

admira
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Complex world-building...in both respects.

Okay, excuse the poor pun. But this story has world-building not just from a mechanical point (the MC is a creation deity) but also from a literary point. This isn't the only story about such a thing, but it certainly handles it the most gracefully.

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The characters makes sense, and it doesn't feel like the design decisions were made superficially. (Example of superficial decisions: reincarnation trope when the MC only uses past knowledge to kickstart a sweets empire and gather a harem.)

Information is handled without hideous infodumps. Grammar and spelling are great. Give it a read; even if it isn't your cup of tea, it's still an interesting start.

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Now for the long version... (1/2 for the author, 1/2 for fellow readers)

Story Elements

You don't have to be in the know for any sort of niche culture (reincarnation stories, cultivation, etc.) to enjoy this story. If anything, I've appreciated the very lack of references to "otaku" pop culture. 

There are, of course, elements in common with other series. For example, the "blue boxes" or the idea of realm-building on a timed schedule. However, they are addressed in a way that's unobtrusive and fresh. 

 

Characterization

I especially appreciate the fact that the main character is neuter, and it actually fits. This isn't some macho-acting, technically androgynous being whose subplot revolves around getting functioning equipment for its harem. As for what the feminine version of that would be, I'm not even sure. 

Moreover, this is "powerful" done well. The MC is powerful, definitely in the "OP" bracket of things. However, this doesn't prevent conficts in the story from happening. It also doesn't cause horrible power creep (yet) that is so common. The reasons behind the MC's actions and inactions are belivable. 

Partially to make up for this, the story also focuses on other characters. I'm normally not a big fan of this, even when it's handled well(ish). However, the various characters are both unique and memorable. I had some trouble as the number of characters increased. For the most part, there were enough casual mentions (in narration or dialogue) to recall, "Oh, right, there was ___ too."

 

Information Delivery

Then, there's the info delivery. I have read very few non-published stories that deliver that much information so well. There simply aren't infodumps. Part of it is the fact that we, the readers, are there many steps of the way as the world itself is created. 

Information about things outside the world, such as the MC's past, are also delivered in small amounts. You get to piece together scraps of information to answer questions along the way. This is one series where I'm not left wondering about plot holes. 

 

The Name

The #1 thing I'm unsatisfied with is the novel's name. Re: Deity is just so...generic. As a rule of thumb, I stay away from anything with "Re:" in the title (excepting the original, Re:Monster). Even calling it "Stratera Luotian" would be better. 

 

Conclusion

And...that's it for now! My verdict is a shocking 5 stars--and I hate giving 5 stars--because I can't find any real flaws in the story. Usually, I don't even like kind, benevolent MC's. Yet the main character's personality fits perfectly as a benevolent (yet also carefree) creation deity who isn't entirely without flaws. 

+Follow, +Fave :3

Argidoll
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Well thought out and executed

The story is great, the idea is original, there was obviously a lot of thought put into these characters and settings. Well written, no glaring issues, but it might be better to slow down the pace a little, as the story glosses over a lot of interesting stuff. For example, the whole city of cultivators doesn't get filled in much, and the pacing skips a bunch of character development. I kind of want more of the minor dieties to at least have names to associate with their domains, instead of jus being referred to as "the other gods". Slow down the pace a litle, flesh out the characters a little more, there's no rush, right?

kvothe1
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I didn't think I'd like the premise, gave it a chance anyways and was pleasantly surprised at how well the author makes it work. If you enjoy dungeon novels then this novel is for you, it gives a macro version of dungeon novel style creation, along with elements of a LITRPG in the form of first person stories about some of the side characters. Overall very well executed and I recommend that everyone try it out.

bigfoob
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Really excited to see where this goes. It deserves all 5 stars based on the 3 chapters that are up right now the grammar is great, the story is intriguing and while there hasn't been much time to flesh them out I'm interested in finding out more about the characters.

 

I'll try to edit this review as the story continues.

 

P.S. You requested ideas in a chapter so, I'm not sure how much you already have planned for skill trees or if you're even including them but as a God of Balance it would be cool to have the tree split into Creation - Destruction - and Void (or something else that's focused on negating magical and physical things).

BakaLich
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One of the most FANTASTIC universe building story I have ever read

TheLoserEllimist
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Such an incredible story. Really wonderful!

Even without considering the epic amount of shitty writing hosted on this site, this novel stands apart from cultivation and fantasy novels in just about every way. This story is beautiful in whole and in all its parts. Thank you. 

TerranImperium
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I like it its profound and original , but i think you should do a lot more world building in the mortal realm like a little bit of the Xu clan the descendants of Leo and Celene or the city that Dei created and more informations of the other dieties , i liked the POV of Inesa or Irene ? don't remember that minor diety it was interesting perhaps more interaction between the dieties or their point of view of the Big Five and Statera

CandyAddict
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Spoiler-Free Review (as of ch. 40 [Like Parent, Like Child])

The worldbuilding is phenomenal, and the characters feel real. The author manages to seamlessly integrate the enormous scope of xianxia novels with LitRPG/dungeon novels, and is able to flesh out a story, world, characters, and mechanics without being hampered by the plot-armor, endless rushed powercreep or infodumps common to both genres. The protagonist is pretty much how one would envision a benevolent god to be. All of the characters show signs of growth and development

The only other story that I can think of that compares is "Overseer", here on RRL.

This is one of my favorite stories, and I hope this story inspires other similar works, as I enjoy the worldbuilding premise.