Stop Calling Me A Demon King

by BakaGrappler

Original Action Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Harem Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Strategy Strong Lead Summoned Hero
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Stop Calling Me A Demon King is the story of a man who was forcefully abducted into another world against his will. It's a world of swords, magic, monsters, and mismatched technology and politics. And the main character is having none of it. He's just concentrating on making his way in the world, no matter who he has to destroy in the process.

Is there a need to play nice when you never wanted to be involved at all? What are the effects on a person when the most cold blooded actions are what are necessary? Our "hero" is going to find out, whether he wants to or not.

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ShaadyGuy
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The writing in this story is very solid. This review score may be high and possibly overly positive, but that is because I am judging the story in comparison to other stories I have read on this site, and I have found a lot of them to be lacking in various areas (though maybe I haven't been reading the right ones.)

First and, most importantly for me, is the way you have used first person to establish a distinct voice for your main character. The advantage of first person stories is that you can quickly establish interest in your story by the way the narrator presents it. Your understanding of character writing is strong, as when the story briefly switched to another POV, it was immediatley apparent that the story was being told by a different character. The great thing about that chapter is that it also showed that the story being presented to us by the main character is colored by his perception of events, and that from an outside perspecive his version of events can be seen to be somewhat unreliable.

I like the magic system, seems so far like a pretty soft system of magic (the limits of what it can and cannot do have not been fully explored) but I like that the main characters abillitys so far have had good logical consistency to them. Also while you have shown him to be very powerful in the story so far, I didn't get the feeling that there would be nothing to challenge him (though this is subject to how you go from here). I like that haven't given a concrete explanation for the source of his power and slowed the story down with pointless exposition. I also liked the internal consistency of the magic presented so far, MC can manipulate air and solidify air, cool, that means he can also stop soundwaves from escaping a room.

The worldbuilding has also been good far, the characters in the world seemed competent at their jobs and seem to have their own agency, also like the whole military experiment angle, sets up a lot of good potential for the world in the future. Good descriptions of environment also.

Unrelated, but the names of the fantasy characters in this have been great so far, they flow naturally and don't sound awkward or "fake" as names.

I am curious as to whether you have an outline planned or you are discovery writing this story.

I wish I could be more critical becuase that might be more useful for you, but for now keep up the good work.

MadHat3r
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It doesn't hurt to read and I don't remember any obvious mistakes, however this is after only 2 chapters and I have no standards.

Keep it up :P