Dragon Sign: Gold & Glory

by MH Johnson

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Secret Identity Summoned Hero
All his life, Sorn had dreamed of living a life of excitement and adventure, free to shape his own destiny. He knew there were numerous lands to explore filled with exciting opportunities, wondrous civilizations just beyond the horizon.

Countless realms his family would love to see in ashes, once great peoples forced to bend on broken knees before his clan.

Sorn, however, was convinced that there was more than one way to amass his fortune, ways that didn't require burning all opposition to the ground.

Yet pressure was mounting for him to take his destined place, his mother's eyes always watching.

Only in secret could Sorn and his cousins plan their escape, and only when the most potent of rituals suffers the most catastrophic of failures did they dare to make their move. Even if the move was completely unexpected, and they were utterly unprepared for what was to come.

Waking up in a land exotic and strange, the four youths embrace a world of wondrous possibilities where trade, treasure, treacherous nobles, and empires bent on conquest are all in play.

They were to determined to make the most of it. After all, they could never go home.
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CanadianKarbon
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Great concept, with potential. Please rethink Sorn's current development

I have enjoyed reading most of the story so far. The premise of the story is what got me interested in reading. 

Four young dragons, surviving in a world that they are unprepared to face.
 
Not to repeat User: QZPMBRI
 
I will focus on a few things that bothered me in the last few chapters.
 
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 First: How old are the boys. Sorn's age has been floating between 12-15. While all we know of the Triplets is that they are preteens and have been taken under Sorns care since they were toddlers.  What is their age gap? how old was Sorn when he started taking care if them?

 
During the first 120,000 (More than a book in word count.) words of the story. Sorn has had the well-being of  Fitz, Hanz, and Lieberman as his number one priority. Never forgetting to mention how important they are to his being. His care for the triplets being the defining characteristic of his character. But after spending a few hours with a girl he just met. He completely forgot about protecting the boys. To the point that he would have caused their deaths.
 
It took Halence far too long to force Sorn to abandon the idea of facing an army alone. He ended up using their contract to force his decision. 
 
Sorn up until this point had been a smart kid. Ignorant and naive, but not stupid. He now believes that the great contract he has with Halence, was a terrible idea that binds him. When the contract is actually a great deal. 
I understand that you have been writing in that Sorn is awakening his boy parts. With the first two girls being an awkward experience for him to go through. 
 
Sorn is perfectly aware that the enemy has the ability to hurt him. Even in his dragon form, he may not be safe from ballistas. If Sorn was still using his head he would know that he could not defeat the Empire and would only succeed in revealing their existence to the enemy. The only practical thing to do is to leave the city and the princess?  
Kidnap her like a normal dragon!
Bring her back to free her people in another arc.
 
Sorn has already stated that the triplets cannot be left alone. He understands they will be killed if discovered. But now he is fine leaving them alone when he goes to fight an unnecessary fight alone.
 
I believe this is out of character for Sorn. While also making side characters we have met redundant. If the boys can just burn the world whenever they are angry. Then what purpose do the side characters serve after the boys are established with money.
 
P.s If I remember correctly the empire had green flames as attack magic. There be (other) Dragons....? (I really wish it was there older brothers.) 
Aapjuh
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Great story, Great grammar, Great humor.

Grammar is damn near perfect, and the story has great humor intertwined with great story telling.
The MC's interactions with eachother are awesome and really gives you the feeling of a close knit family,

Personal opinion though, to many dragged on detail and explainations about things i don't really need, i found myself skipping 1/4th of almost every chapter.
and the overly old english/noble speech is tiresome, it would have been fine during introductions so i could set their persona's in my mind, after the intro tho it gets bothesome.

still gave it 4 stars though as personal tastes om mine should not degrade this great story to much.

qzpmbri
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Goddam this is good. Also add comedy tag.

This amazing piece of literary work has such an amazing story that surprises me to not even find one review.

First off the chapters are extremly long. I would have to say that it takes a good portion of  hours per chapter.

The characters are real. They act and leran, adapt, and grow. Something most writers cannot create.

The Grammar is exceptional. 

The style tends to have rather long paragraphs, at some points I start to skim parts that seem to be over description or just a character ranting. Overal the style is great.

The story on the other hand is fenominal in my opinion. I love the politics from this book. Very few novels make me enjoy  characters talking to each other. This is one of them. Conversation becomes a wordly action scene.

Overall this is a gem that many people should enjoy.

johnangel
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Imagine the characters, the world and the style is finely car one of the best of it's kind and then imagine this car being used by the owner as a lavatory.

That's what I was feeling as I read the story all the wasted potential it had the characters, the world crafting the nice magic systems the nice humor all of it wasted in a mundane story that goes nowhere for the later half of the novel as the characters become entranced in a inconsequential war by the fastest lovestruck I've ever read; I see you, I love you now I'll die for you and sacrifice my brothers.


It all felt so wrong and is such a shame.
Anyway kudos to the writer for his awesome setting and characters.

Roxt
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Was expecting something different... Glad I was wrong.

From the title I was expecting a somewhat different story, and thats the only reason it took so long to start reading this. Having time on my hands, I decided to give it a shot, and I knew by the end of the first chapter that so long as you kept writing this I would continue reading it.

What was i expecting? Something like a monster hunter self insert. That might not have been too bad, but what was written instead was so much better.

Dragons are awesome in any context... nuff said.

m45halo45m
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so i dont usualy do reviews but this story was just too good 

 

lets start with style, i think the chapters in this story are the longest i have ever seen on a royal road story and i mean that in a good way another thing i like about this is the descriptions , the author describe every detail of the story and it makes you feel like you are really there while also giving the feel of a real novel and not a royal road one . the only downside is that sometimes there is just too much description but its still fine.

about grammar ,im not a native english speaker so i cant say a lot but i didnt see a single mistake .

the story itself is not somthing i have seen before and its really refreshing. the world the story is set in is intresting and with the descriptions of the author it just fells amazing . the plot of the stry is around the adventure of the 4 protagonists and there is no main "bad guy" wich is also a change from most of the storys on this site and a good one at that . 

as i said before there are 4 protagonists in the story , at the start i was sure i wouldent like it because normally when someone on royalroad try to use a lot of charactars they end up feeling bland but not only this in not the case here even the side characters all feel uniqe and have their own reasons to do things.

my only complaint about this story is altough as the author said this story has over 300,000 words (around 4 books) it was too short... does that even make sense?

so tl;dr a great story definatly give it a try! 

 

ZestyLemon
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Author did more than tell a story. He draws you into its world

Amazing story. Some might consider it slow and long winded, but every detailed paragraph draws you further into this meticulously created world that you and the main characters will explore together.

Little to no grammatical errors were present in the story, with a style of writing that many professional novelists would envy.

The characters are not just tools for world building but unique at every turn, making even unassuming side characters interesting and important to the development of the main characters ever growing personality along with granting deeper immersion into this world.

The story itself might not be what everyone would expect, but it was well planned and written. Every scene had a purpose, whether it be world building, character building, or just a scene of intelligent comedic relief. 

Overall, I would highly recommend readers to give this story a try. You may find yourself loving it, like I did. You might not like it much at all. Either way, you will find this author deserves recognition for his talent in writing.

Thanks for your time, if you read my whole review ^-^

Grimmas
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Something different from the usual RRL fare

This is likely one of the better stories on RRL. It's more of a traditional fantasy story but with a mix of Spice & Wolf and MaoYuu. 

The author has a good command of English, better than most webfiction writers, which shows especially in the more advanced sentence structure and lack of run-ons so common on RRL otherwise. Sadly, there are still quute a few elemental mistakes and misspellings throughout, like aid vs aide, off vs of, their vs they're, and other homonyms.

Style and characterization are strangely both the strongest and the weakest parts of this story. Sorn and his charges are well fleshed out and their dialogue feels natural. Especially the offhand banter. Practically everyone else,  however, speaks with the same voice and suffers from the same problems. Characters will unnaturally go into long and winded tirades or lectures for the sake of infodumps. They will even do this when in an emergency.  Nothing like stopping for a bit of exposition about the arcane arts when a patient is bleeding to death on the floor, after all! Not to mention that Knights, kings and lords speak with the same flowery language as guards, blacksmiths, healers, and merchants. That makes little sense and fails to show differences between classes. 

Some passages are quite tedious and long winded, especially the exposition which takes up half the book, but overall this is a very enjoyable story. It is, however, by no means complete. It cuts off in the middle with most plot threads unresolved (the academies, the farm, the siege, the invasion, the grain barge, the romance, Sorn's scars, etc, remain dangling threads for instance), and has the feeling of a very long prologue instead. One can only hope that the author one day decides to continue the story. With so much flowery exposition now out of the way, there is an opportunity for a tighter narrative, provided the author can find more appropriate voices for the side characters.

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Trully a wondrefull story

the only slight wrong i could find is the slow pace. but it's so well written that it doesn't really matter.

I'm not a native english, and sometime it's a little bit hard to understand all the sentance but i think it really is well written and in theme with the story.

Continue like that.

amassie
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Great Concept but very repetitive.

As much as i love the concept of the story, the fact that every single character has the need to explain ALL of their modivations for each and every decision they make in at least 3 paragraphs leads to so much redundancy that I ened up skippinng half of each chapter without missing anything.