ASHURA- THE DEMON SOVEREIGN

by byjojohn

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead Supernatural

A God killed by other Gods but saved by the Supreme One, Given another chance in life. What happens when he is born as a ruthless demon with the blessing of the Supreme one.

 

This is my frst time trying for a fiction. Being not so good with english i request you to please correct me when i am wrong

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An extreme lack of character

I know it may seem unfair to say, but the way the character is presented is in the format of:

A: Event happens

B: MC has a lackluster response with no real depth to his thoughts

C: Says some sappy words to his family that is written almost as if an unfeeling robot is the one controlling the body.  

All in all it needs some serious work on the dialogue, and less wish fulfillment from the author.