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Decigres
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It's not a PARADY STORY

THIS BOOK IS NO PARADY~~ 

IT has really good grammer and a strong plot line. It is more of a plot based story but it still shows character development!! Great story by the way. 

Crown
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Really good all around. Early on but I like the way it is progressing. Wonderful story with a great style. Even before being proofread the grammar is 4 star minimum and thats if your being picky.

Blah Blah Blah, Yadda Yadda Yadda.

It's really good and worth checking out. Better then most stories here on RRL and deserving of a five star rating.

Aramisofsteel
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Although I am rating your story with five stars it is probably only worth three and a half right now, but you executing your premise wonderfully and so far you have kept both plot progression and character development to more than acceptable standards. So you are already succeeding in the hardest part. I am sure with more practice your writing skills will increase and by the end of your story it will definitely be worth five stars. I will keep reading eagerly to see how it progresses. 

Suit
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That raw sauce got me craving for more

6 stars you say? Ask, and you shall receive.  

djeruknipis
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Good Concept, Shaky Delivery

The author has attitude! I like that. I just want to advice to not take people's talk too seriously and take break every once in a while. Has (s)he done that? I wouldn't know. I just stumbled upon this fiction today. So, here's the review;

The Good

Chapter one is FANTASTIC!

The author skipped the tedious part, just told the important point of the story. But he didn't forget to add some details in-between, thus he ensured story's continuity. Well, I like the authors who let readers to fill the blank themselves. Kept the pace and  allowed wicked twist if author need it later on. Just don't overdose us on them.

The Bad

It's readable. Good English, but the flow is horrible. Mastery comes with time spending doing it. Please continue. I've read quite a number of fiction who started awful only to attain great fluency later on. Give it a year.

Numbers, they're wild! True that this novel doesn't establish standard so far, so I can take them rather easily. Is 25 INT a lot? Or is it a little? I don't know. But it's fine. However, to imagine a some sort of test being centralized, with thousands upon thousands flocking in, I must suspense some disbelief. A thousand may not look much in the modern time, but it's a huge number for your setting.

Culture? Why some Japanese honorifics seeping in when your setting is, umm, I actually don't know what's your base for culture. But when a lot of names have apostrophes, and cities sporting wondrous architectures, things felt off.

The Ugly

You claimed you don't need more reader. You think what you have now is enough. Well, I would like to rephrase it into, "I've found the niche I'd like to write to, so I will concentrated on them from now on." Because the former claim sounds arrogant. Fortunately, it's forgivable. I've found your command in English is still developing you may not mean what you said. Just don't so quick on voicing your thought, yeah? If you disagree, just stay silent. If you agree, meet them with enthusiasm. This kind of approach will do you well later on. Except for delivering criticism like I do now. Bluntness works better if you want to hold author to higher standard.

Good luck

Genshikenron
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To be honest, the title drew me into reading the story. Im a sucker for any LitRPG type story and this one gave me that and more. The writing is not anywhere stellar but it looked polished and well thought out. I know this is a bit too early to make a review, but I would just like everyone to know that its a good read. Im just glad I found a hidden gem. My rating though would change over time but for now... this is it. 

Congratulations and more chapters to come!

TheLoneMerc
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How to beat the Dungeon Boss is a great LitRPG story I managed to stumble across in my spare time in hopes of wasting it away. What I didn't expect was the qualtiy of the work to be so awesome to say the least!

The grammar is rich and vast, providing a nice immersive story that is interesting and descriptive. Although there are slight problems regarding past, future, and present tense due to English not being the main language. I believe with the help of others (E.g. Brian P., etc.) however, that he may possibly overcome this issue and create the start of one of Royal Roads greatest novels to date.

The story, as you know. Is based on a LitRPG, and as all LitRPGs, it possesses a status screen, level system, monsters, magic, etc. It's the usual. Although, it provides a twist by converting the main character itself into a skeleton, something I have probably read once or twice about. Although not to the level where I like the work or provide a review as this one does. The story hasn't been fully fleshed out yet, but I hope for something great to happen as the story has done so far. The world building is also done at a generally great pace, allowing us to the perceive the world in a greater more broader light than we had during the first chapter where we only knew the confined spaces of the dungeon.

The characters, more specifically the protagonist known as 'Hezues'. Has a defined and great personality, although I would like for more character  development to take place. He was one controlled and ruled by one of unknown origin. Rebelling in hopes of a better more greater life. For something more.

So far the book has me interested, although the chapter release rate may seem slow to some. It is worth to wait it out. It is a great jewel among many. Let's pray for a great book that doesn't devolve into a piece of trash which is my novel.

Ringostrauss
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Enjoyable just waiting for more.

Glad to see an author who seeks editors right away.  Not enough written to give a full review, but I've heavily enjoyed what I've read so far.  Looking forward to more.

The next bit is just in terms of if you decide you want to turn this into a novel you sell on kindle or some such.  You could easily fill in a bit more to the beginning right after he read the intelligence book until he got out of the dungeon.  I am in no way trying to say what you should write, just saying that if you ended up needing some more it would be a good place to pad to add a bit more character development at the beginning.

Tristus
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A story with good potential!

Well normally I don't write a review for a story with only 8 Chapters, but as I write this we are on chapter 8, so I'll assume some things.

First of all the story is not really unique, sure I never read a story with a skeleton bottom feeder as MC but there are some similiar ones. Being a slave of a master that MC didn't even saw make it interesting but not enough.

So what makes this story good? First of all the author don't force human feelings on the MC, he is a skeleton and behaves like one. He is cold and calculating, selfish but no anti-hero or villain. He also doesn't try to be a hero, which is good. 
The story has some worldbuilding in it, rules for advanturers, city planning, items you name it. It feels like Hunter X Hunter but from a different point of view.

As I'm writing this there are some problems with it, we don't really know how strong MC is, how strong other people are in relation. Which skills are there, how can he learn it, what paths he needs to follow and which one he will really follow. Biggest problem is that we get to know some really strong people so it is possible that he will get some OP help or gets swayed in their politics (both are bad if you ask me)

I hope we will see the struggle of the common skeleton without some cheating abilities or OP help from some shady guys. Please keep the good work, it's a pleasure to read it.

wman3
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This is a amazing read that starts with a similiar theme to other fictions but besides the start is completely new and original. This brings a new perspective to dunguens and minions alike and I can't wait for the future releases to come! 

This is as of CH 9