Leaving Earth

by Warfox

Original ONGOING Adventure Drama Psychological Sci-fi Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead Strong Lead Virtual Reality

After Dr. Hawthorne Crenshaw's university experiences a terrorist attack, he undertakes a titantic effort to colonize a new planet in an effort to rescue some small part of humanity from what he suspects is an unstoppable spiral into a Dark Age on Earth. Subjecting himself to tens of thousands of years of repeated cycles of cryogenic freezing and unfreezing to monitor his passengers, he and his AI T.I.A. shephard Earth's first, and perhaps only effort into colonizing a new planet.

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Ozhika
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A story about a not so unlikely future.

Leaving Earth is the original story of a man who, after surviving a terrorist attack, begins to see that humanity is on course to be the cause of its own destruction. With this knowledge in hand, the only course of action action is to leave Earth. Leaving Earth is told through the perspective of an emotionally broken man who, despite his disillusion with humanity, realizes that the success of his mission may be the last chance for the survival of the human race. Maybe life itself.

 

Leaving Earth is not a generic science fiction story, and it is not fantasy disguised as science fiction. It is less Star Wars, or even Star Trek, and more 2001 or the Martian. I would place it in the genera of hard science fiction. But, unlike some works in that genera, the author doesn’t attempt to impress the reader with his knowledge of esoteric mathematical equations or concepts unfamiliar to the layman. The story takes current and plausible near future technologies and uses them in a realistic way. Furthermore, the author leverages the use of these technologies to smoothly introduce a very possible and grim future that the reader may live to witness. The authors reflection on this possible future, the future that spawned the terrorist attack that sent the protagonist on his voyage, are a commentary on many of the social, political, and economic issues of today, and are a sharp warning of the extreme results those problems may produce if left unchecked.

LilWubWub
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A story different from the rest

I have absolutely loved this story so far! There isn’t nearly as much action as other stories found on this site, but I believe that truly sets this apart! The characters feel life-like, with interactions that flow as natural as they could. The story also brings up subjects to consider when reading, which serve to captivate and stimulate the reader! The style of the author makes this an easy read, even if the concepts behind them are subjects that are hard to grasp! I highly recommend this story to anyone looking for something different than anything else on this website! 

Xplizit_Fluffy
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Please continue writing! I love the idea of the story when it comes to Dr. Hawthorn and T.I.A the A.I becoming companions on the trip to a new world.

Robertp3001
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A suprisingly well written story

I didn't really think much of reading this story because I typically like to read fantasy type novels but this story is just too good to pass up.  It's a story that doesn't require alot of emotional investement because there are really only two characters you have to care about in the story.

If you are bored, I would recommend giving this story a read.

Demiurge
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A very promising story

I've just finished chapter 14 and I have to say that your story is very promising. While it may seem slow moving, what with wanting to see more of what will happen during the colonization, this story is in fact quite realistic in some ways and doesn't seem rushed. I feel as if you have put a lot of thought into this and I hope to be able to read your work until such a time as it is deemed completed. Good work ! :)

RobotSamurai
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 Its been a really good story so far. It's one of the best Sci-fi stories on this site.

Glasses
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this is great. Well thought out story, realistic characters, and a writing style that keeps it interesting. High quality scifi, in that the subject matter is thought out, the science realistic-ish, and the etting real and believable. Like you’d expect from Michael Crichton or Andy Weir.

The only flaw for me is the grammar. The author can’t seem to get the tenses right. It’s future tense one minute, then past, then present.

Apart from that minor error, 11/10. Keep up the good work. I’d buy this if it were published, edited, and I had money.

nightreader17
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Thought-provoking and Refreshing

Leaving Earth is a very thought-provoking and refreshing read compared to most other fictions on this site. In brief, it is a story of a scientist/programmer and a developing AI and their millenia-long journey to a neighboring star system as shepherds of the future of humanity, after earth is nearly wiped out by a nuclear winter. 

The best parts of this story is that it does not rely on technical jargon to sound impressive, as many sci-fi fics do. This is a read for people who enjoy the psychological aspect; thinking processes, brief philosophical thoughts, imaginings of a 'worse-case' scenario of current eco/poli/social trends in society. In particular, the focus on how an AI realistically develops its consciousness based on current technology is unique and compelling to read. 

The downsides; it is rather slow paced. If you are looking for action-packed adventure, look elsewhere (or maybe watch Star Wars again). After 200+ pages, we are still only ~150 years of a journey that will take 100,000 years. I suspect some time-jumps will take place, or the story will take a different route altogether, but if you are impatient and want just quick gratification then this may not be the story for you. 

Now, some criticism for the author (note, spoilers). 

Spoiler: Spoiler

Overall, it is a very refreshing and interesting read. If you're bored with all the lit-rpg or reincarnation or dungeon or cultivation fics on this site, I highly recommend you give this story a try.  

Brian P.
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An Emotionless Road Trip in a Cynical Future

In the future posited by Leaving Earth, humanity becomes a caricature of modern policies and social trends. The story seems to want to probe this premise but the society sketched out within isn’t realized enough for it to be compelling and the remaining characters are too dry to become invested in.

(Please note, this is a review up to Chapter 10)

Since H.G. Wells wrote of a man visiting the future in The Time Machine, and likely before that, writers have used the future to comment upon their own society. Sometimes aspirational and at other times a dire warning, the path of showing the future and speculating how it came to that point is well worn, and for good reason. It’s an extremely potent trope for showing us the warped version of our own selves and making us question the paths we are going down.

However, the dystopia we’re shown in Leaving Earth lacks a compelling vision of how society degenerates, instead throwing everything it can think of at us as reasons for the downfall of western culture. Social media, universal basic income, terrorism, anti-hate speech laws, religion, monopolistic corporations, foreign wars and police actions, liberal college campuses, fat acceptance, immigration and racial tension; you name a current trend or talking point and there’s likely between a sentence and a paragraph telling us of the calamities unleashed by allowing such a thing to exist. That paragraph is all we get, though, given to us as if we’re reading the synopsis of a future history book. There are no details given, no personal stories of how the world fell to the point social media created flash-mobs execute people with impunity. They are all presented as a fait accompli, leaving the reader with nothing substantive to ponder over beyond the cynicism through which the author seems to view humanity.

Much of this can be laid at the feet of the story’s premise: Dr. Hawthorne Crenshaw, whom we are told is a genius but socially stunted, is awoken every thirty-four years for four days, during which he will make some minor repairs to the colony ship he’s on, attempt to teach an A.I. how to be human and observe the rapid decline of western society. Because of this premise, as well as it being written in the first person from Dr. Crenshaw’s perspective for most of the chapters, we’re given the above summaries in an extremely utilitarian, emotionless style that fails to compel the reader to invest in either the future society or the characters learning of the events.

And were the focus on the journey, rather than the fall of Earth, this might be acceptable. I recall a similar setup in Dennis E. Taylor’s novel We Are Legion (We Are Bob) but where those novels focused on the internal life and technological advancement of their main characters, keeping Earth’s fate as an important side story, Leaving Earth doesn’t seem interested in the science of travelling through space; repairs and calculations take place off-screen or with a single sentence, denying us both the realistic descriptions of The Martian and the technobabble of Star Trek. The artificial intelligence, T.I.A., begins as a blank slate and has yet to progress enough to be called a character in her own right. And Dr. Crenshaw, despite berating himself for bottling up emotions early on, feels as mechanical as any of Asimov’s robots.

Which leaves this reader to focus on a weakly drawn, Eurocentric vision of our future where everything one can think of evidently lead to ruin.

In fairness to the author, their grammar is good, especially for this website. It’s certainly worth reading the first few chapters, as they seem representative, and obviously some have found this story to be compelling. To them and the author, I wish you well but don’t feel any need to continue this journey with you.

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Waiting for the journey...

I've read your other reviews, one person writing with black text (I use dark theme). I don't mind the exaggerations, the Media is evil; but I do think that the actualization of the fall of humanity on Earth was explained as a scene depicted for us readers is clearly just filler... We don't need to know about the president's daughter going into a bunker so we? The athlete, does knowing how she was injured in the blast effect the story? Finally, all these events, even summarized, are unknown to our story characters... They only know the single phase from the last transmission that their colleges are going dark, and readings from the after math from the dead planet.

 

We need probably another 10 chapters before I edit this review.

 

I'll keep reading, but you need to keep writing.