Shattered Soul

by GhostReaper

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Mystery Female Lead Magic Reincarnation Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Scorned by the humans of earth, the shadow walker and telekinetic Sarah Marie Johnson was executed as a traitor to the human race. After her death she meets the seraph Tavariel, who explains to her that since her birth her soul had been shattered.

The young Moon Elf princess Linea has always been different. Never as strong as her siblings, but magically gifted, she soon had to bury her hopes to become a Void Hunter. Instead focusing on a path to become a healer, she performs a ritual to strengthen the bond to her goddess. Unexpectedly her ritual is hijacked by Tavariel, who guides her to the place, where someone awaits her.

This is the story of two parts of a soul, which were never meant to be divided.

This is their journey.


Hello everyone,

this is my first attempt for a story on my own. As English is not my native language, I would appreciate any mistakes to be called out, so I can fix them. I have a rough outline were my story will lead, but ultimately I have not fleshed out the whole story yet.

What can you expect:

My story will be mature and is only recommended to an audience older than 18. I will paint a picture, which can be very grim at times, but also very lighthearted. Just as life is. To understand the feelings and motivations of characters, you will have to read through all the good and bad things happening to them. I will give specific warnings before every chapter where I deem it necessary or appropriate. If you can not handle certain topics like death or suicide, rape or any consent-based sexual activity, racism or violence, you are advised to skip this story. You have been warned.

I plan on a release schedule of two chapters per week, normally every monday and friday at 5pm CET. This is subject to change depending on my work schedule and overall writing speed, which I have yet to balance.

If you got any questions regarding my story, feel free to contact me via comments or messages.

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bloo233
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Awesome story, this reads a lot like an actual high fantasy story you can find in a bookstore. I could tell the effort the author put into the world building here. It's interesting to read about and it gives me the 'begining of an epic adventure' kind of feel. Only 11 chapters in, but that was enough to totally captivate me.

Grammar wise, I had no problems reading the story. Couldn't even tell that english wasn't your first language.

 

I hope to see more!

Sinder
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Echoing BLOO233

Up to chapter 16, easy to read and enjoyable!

Endless Paving
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I am just a voice in your head

(Chapter 17, four-ish days per update)

A great story so far about two or more people who are the same person. They are in the same body as well, for convenience. Some words are slightly misspelled into the kind of words that actully are words despite being the weongs ones. Not all readers will notice this as much as others, and only some will really be bothered to care. The story style is a normal young adult style thriller with the sudden fantastical world, personal revalation, and ominous hordes thing. It’s not too generic since it has some interesting mind/soul finickery, but people without patience for that type of plot will have to miss out on the fun. The highest recomemdation from me is the characters, as they are very engaging and well defined for how far I am in the story already. We’ve got all the good feels: anxiety, guilt, trauma, determination, happiness. All that good stuff, not those stupid characters that never juggle their feelings and work on a one-track emotion. Dynamic feelings.

crusaderbond
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A good story written about my personal hell

I assume since the mc's are fragmented pieces of a soul, they always felt like something was missing or whatever. I really like the story but the thought of having to share a body with someone else gives me chills. 

 

It's very good though, give it a go!