In the Naruto world (1)

I do not understand what's going on in this novel; I understand the plot somewhat, but I just don't understand that if he has a million times the charka of the nine tails; why isn't he already the strongest in the world. I know someone is going to say because it's the lack of exprience, but that's bull. With that amount of charka, he could destroy a continent instantly.

This novel started in a good note and I expected a lot from it. The author's idea of merging Naruto's world with his own ideas was filled with potential as well.

But because of the system, the MC became a bit too overpowered. Some of the new characters in the novel are likeable but the older characters seemed to have lost their original personality from the anime.

The plot almost seems to be non existant (at least for now). The fights in this novel are short and very uninteresting.

As I said earlier, this novel had a lot of potential. There a lot of new ideas put inside this novel but they have not connected very well with each other.

In a simple sentence:- This novel seems like a hodgepodge of different ideas and seems to be running of purely the author's whim.

I am a big fan of Naruto series and had read a lot of fan fictions before this but I was thoroughly disappointed by this one.

Give it a try if you want to. Everyone has different taste and you might like it. But I would rather not pick it up again.

it is a good story and i don't like harem too but a trios could be fun with some fights 

It is full of shit. Horrible character development. It makes no sense. You push characters and random stories out your ass every chapter. You branded your own mc as a rapist. The blue screen thing is not funny/cute/entertaining. WHY AND HOW DID ITACHI GET MARRIED. Who the fuck Is Isabella and how and what kekei genkai makes her so op that she can botch slap pains asshole. Why are the only changes you made to the story shit like making enemies stronger. Here is a change we would all love. Itachi didn't kill all the uchihas and is a good big bro. Yahiko didn't die so there is no pain. Minato died but kushina lived to protect her baby or vise versa. This would have been good changes but you just had to fuck it all up since the beginning eh

Wish fulfillment story from someone who's probably never written anything, and doesn't even try to write well. 

Grammar is better than other stories on this site, but still quite bad. 

Probably not worth your time. 

So, uh... Yeah. 

This story really is something else. I don't think I've ever read prose this bad in my life - at least not prose that somehow still becomes popular. The author absolutely needs an editor and a rewrite, because reading this has probably given me a brain tumour.

I made through almost three chapters before deciding to look out for my health and giving up. I suggest you don't do the same. Just don't touch it at all. 

The author apparently doesn't know how to write conversation. You don't write like this:

"Man, this novel really isn't any good." (me)

"what do you mean, this novel is totally great, I don't even have to use question marks, full stops, or anything, I can just keep going and vomit words like there's no tomorrow" (author) 

I mean, really? Run-on sentences that last longer than Forrest Gump's cross-country run, character writing more 2-dimensional than Pac-Man, terrible dialogue, and a "hehe xd" random system that appears once in a while are some of the few things so very wrong with this novel.

I suggest you take a couple of writing classes, scrap this novel, and start over, because I think I may have to sue for damages if this brain tumour develops. 

Best novel om Royal Road so far

the story is interesting and you want to Get involed in this world and the funny yet proper way the scenes happen. I Also like that the auther is doing polls to SEE What the readers want 

please continue writing it's great story and better than other fan fic. 

Well i have to say I'm open mind about any novel i read, and my English suckk!

The story is a little bit to fast, so it's hard to enjoy it. Cuz we jump a lot in the story. MC vey OP in the bad way, i have nothing against OP MC, but it's boring. I have prefer if he had strength from the beginning of the story and take over ( Dying body) someone from anbu division. He can do his mission more easy and we don't need the werid setting we get in the story.

Like how come everyone are so stupid? I mean come on.... everyone trust MC as is natural things to do.

Still, it's not so bad, but i think you (Author) need to rewrite the story. More details is a good things! Don't make him OP to much, let him work hard for it or just make him stronger from the beginning and do some mission so he can get skills.

Anyway,  good luck. And i hope you get better in the future.

Ok first off I would like to say that it's good and I recommend it but

The story is not the best but it is fun to read

The characters can fill one dimension sometimes *Sometimes* not all time (I think one dimension is the word I'm looking for)

The Grammar is ok and style is good

now I will just say that I will be dropping this not because its bad but because of the HAREM that is coming now as of Chapter 15 the only reason I started to read this is because there was no HAREM tag but the author did a poll and the HAREM win which is sad because I don't like HAREM but hey what can I do :{